Hey there! I'm here to review your work.
I know it's a weird thing to start with, but your style of poetry reminds me of my own. We both have a love of imagery and reflection in long poems, and it's cool seeing another person who loves writing about their feelings and observations in the same way.
I can't speak for my own skills with imagery. However, I can speak for yours, and I can definitely say that I loved all of the different bits of imagery you threw in. It made the poem spring to life on the screen - every little poetic instance of the hard parts of growing up struck me hard. Like @Querencia, I saw myself in your poem. Not entirely, but just enough to wish I could have been there for the girl who you were describing.
Since we have similar writing styles, the only (somewhat) critique I can give is that you might want to cut the length of your poem. I honestly have no idea where you would want to make it more concise. I'm also not entirely sure if you need to - the entire poem feels like it flows naturally, and I think taking some parts away might ruin the bigger picture.
At the very least, you could always make it a collection of poems about growing up, and expand more on each time period.
I hope my review helps, and thank you for writing this wonderful piece. <3
(I'll also admit that this poem won me over, so expect more reviews of your poetry to be popping up in the next hour.)

Points: 74
Reviews: 509
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