Hey there, brookeallo! I'm here to review your work.
Your poem's title suggests that the poem is about an affair. As someone who has never been in a situation like that before, I found this poem surprisingly relatable. You did a great job capturing what it's like to fall in love with someone - even when you know you shouldn't be.
The lines all flowed together, despite being relatively short. I enjoyed that - it's hard to find a poem that does something like that all the way through. I also enjoyed the lack of a rhyming scheme. Rhymes are a great thing to include in poetry, but, like all literary tools, they have their limits. The lack of poetry made the poem feel more personal.
I don't really have any specific critiques on your poem. The only one that I can think of is that you made a typo in one of the last lines - you put "know" instead of "now".
and by know I can say I'm scared
You might also want to touch more on the affair part. As I mentioned at the start of my review, this poem can easily come across as a regular love poem. I would elaborate more on why this love is so dangerous to the narrator - it would help the reader feel more conflicted when reading through this poem.
Other than that, your poem looks great! It has a lot of memorable lines, and this feel likes the kind of poem I'd want to do a reread of.
I can't wait to read more of your work.
Happy #RevMo !
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