Hello my fellow writer! It's me IcyFireyPheonix as you like to call me! XD So I am popping in here today to leave a review for you!
So let's get to it.
As I'm getting further into the story I can see the path it's going to take, and I'm really excited to see how everything plays out, I've never read a story that has a little toddler as the main character so this is rather interesting for me.
And I'm really starting to like Ala's character, she is really sweet, and I can see she loves her friends. Well to be honest I liked her from the start!
I do want to no more about Tiana and she little group, I have a feeling they will become a really big part of the book later, but right now hey are just bullies so I wonder what hey will do to Ala next.
Now I do wish there was a little more description in this, I mean I don't even no what her dad looks like, and the setting to. A little description here and there will help people become part of your story, unless you have made it the way you did, so the reader can imagine what the characters look like. It's really all up to you.
Other than that I really liked this chapter, it was funny and made me laugh, I must say it's funny reading a book about a child that only thinks having some one else play with her friend is the biggest worry in the world! XD
Anyway I'm glad I could pop in and review this, it was fun, and I am even more hook now that I was before, so amazing job, Keep up the amazing writing and I will be off to the next chapter. Have a great day or night.
Your friend and faithful reader
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion!
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