Young Writers Society

Hi caitlynn! Hiraeth here for a review for this awesome poem.

I love this poem, i really do (i mean, i love any poem that rhymes, but this one rhymes spectacularly).

So like when i read this, I think, for some reason of Arachne, that greek girl who was turned into a spider due to some fall out with Athena (lets not focus on that though, greek mythology can get messed up). When i imagine the narrator, i imagine her as Arachne in pre-spider mode, and i imagine her weaving her beautiful tapestries. What i'm trying to say is, you could provide a visual to the readers, even if they are different visuals compared to each other.

The only line that does not quite match is:
"My life and inner struggle". Obviously, this isn't my poem so i can't decide what goes here, but say if it WAS mine, i'd probably not write this because it doesn't really suit the mystical tone of this poem. It's....off, you know?

other than that, everything's perfect; i love your language (medieval, exactly my type), i love the plot, i love that this is not vague, and pretty much everything there is to love about it.

So keep writing, while i head off to read some more of what you've written (magic is good, by the way. I am a believer)

You did a really good job with the wording. The rhyming was well done too. The only thing negative thing is that at the beginning, you used tale twice. It was a little redundant. However, it was overall a great poem!