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#18 aka 17b

by LadyBird



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Thu Dec 06, 2018 2:47 pm
JulietWrites wrote a review...



This is a very interesting poem. My only critiques are that it's a little overdramatic. "Dogs are our gods". I don't think that many people (or dogs!) feel that way. Most people see dogs as slightly lesser equals because their thinking capabilities are slightly less advanced compared to human brains. This poem isn't very relatable because of the high ideals raised by it. Try to humble it down a bit. And really, "Dogs shall portray the prophets in the greatest light"? That really doesn't accurately portray the way the collective opinion towards dogs and their status in the world. Other than that, It's really quite good.
Keep writing! :)





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