I am alone
The tears shown
You don't care
It isn't fair
Why do I stay
But I cant run away
What is this Pain
I am a Disdain
Holding in my Anger
If let it out, you are in Danger
I stand alone...
I am now unknown...
Hi there Carla here for a review.This poem is so short but yet has so many emotions to it.I really like the layout of this poem, it is different but quite funky, I like it.I really like the rhyming scheme, it fit wells with the title of the poem.I really like the ending "I am now unknown" so many people feel this emotion and are afraid to tell someone about it.I also like how the last 2 lines have the ... after them to show the reader that either the writer hasn't finished his sentence or that he/she is hesitantIf you disagree with any of this please comment Over and out.
Wow this was just a lovely poem. It's one of your best so far. I look forward to reading more.
Hello! This is really cool! I always feel that rhyming is cool in poetry when it's done right (and you did it well-Just be careful about that in the future:)). I love that it makes sense to people and doesn't leave room for confusion. The capitalization throughout helps emphasize the specific words and I really liked that. Thank you for writing! Keep at it!
This is really good!I love the depth, the feeling, the pain. You expressed it really well. What I also love about this poem is that everyone can understand it, it speaks to everyone. At some point in their lives, everyone feels this. My favorite part is the very beginning: "I am alone, The tears shown, You don't care."Keep up the amazing work!
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