I love this! It's such a beautiful poem and it flows together so well.
Firstly I love the way that the poem addresses the reader. It's so common that poems such as this are written in first person and it's really refreshing to see one that isn't.
The imagery and story to this poem was fantastic. There really isn't anything I can falt!
I'm not so sure about the final line, however. Depending on the shark, most sharks can only 'sink' backwards. And that doesn't really kill them. In fact, the majority of sharks can't swim backwards at all and even if they could it's quite unlikely that they will die unless they could do it for an extremely long time. Sinking backwards is, for a shark, rether like holding your breath. It can be done, not forever, but it is possible to do it without dieing.
But, sorry, I'm rambling. The last line really has the shock impact and I love the fact that you ended the poem on the word 'die'. It really just helps the whole thing ring in my ears.
Other than what I've said, there really isn't anything I can falt about this poem. It's very beautiful, thank you!
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