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An Annoying Alarm

by Lake


As I lay cozy, all snug in my bed,

I enjoy the imagination inside my head,

until I hear racket beside my bed.

It's my 5:00 alarm!

I quickly silent you, you annoying alarm.

Then we snooze together and let dreams carry on.

Enjoying the peace, then I'll be darned;

It's my 5:15 reminder!

Now I hush the ringing of my reminder.

Ok Alarm, let's put that behind us.

Eyes just shut, but here goes that timer

It's 7:20. I'm late!!!

                 


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Fri Jan 12, 2018 9:01 pm
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Hiya! Space here for a review.

XD This is wonderful. I relate 100%. This was so funnily written, with a humorous melody, and I liked how you put exclamation marks because it really conveyed how irritated you/the character was.

I really have no complaints or advice for this poem. It made me laugh and it was written really well.

Good job!

-Space the Snickerdoodle




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Fri Jan 12, 2018 2:40 am



I relate to this on a spiritual level. Oh. my. geez. Haha good job!




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Thu Jan 11, 2018 6:26 pm
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Truth




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Hi. This is Kman134. I'm here to review your work.

I'm the same with you. every time my alarm goes off at 5:00, I kept hitting it to silence it. at that point, I just wanted to go back to sleep. then I goes off again and I keep hitting it for an hour. right when it hits 6 or 7, I lose much time to get ready and head to the college campus.

the rhyming was simple and easy to read, and the way each line was placed and perfect.

"It's my 5:15 reminder!

Now I hush the ringing of my reminder.

Ok Alarm, let's put that behind us.

Eyes just shut, but here goes that timer

It's 7:20. I'm late!!!"

This was my favorite part. it made me laugh at your reaction as I have make the same panic whenever I miss an hour.

anyway, this was a pretty good poem. I hope to read more.




Lake says...


thank you, i appreciate it, maybe check out my other poems if you're up to it!:)



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emolemon says...


I did like it :smt003 i'm the exact same way! i was reading it as a rhyme at first and realized it was freeverse. XD iamacinnamonroll!



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emolemon says...


omjosh i feel like your gonna put that anywhere i unintentionally act like a cinnaroll! why didn't i name myself emocinnaroll? now i'm part fruit part cinnamon... :smt003 lol ima new species!



Lake says...


#emocinnafriutbun XD #youareacinnamonbun XDXDXDXDXDXDXD Your welcome cinna bun




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