Young Writers Society

Heya, this is ElvenJedi, here to review your work!

To be completely honest, there is nothing negative to say about this work. The rawness of it is very clear, and I commend you on that; the only truly good writings are ones that speak from experience and truth. This poem is honestly so relatable as well, but not in a cliché/overused way. It's also very well put together- what I mean by that is all fits, it's all consistent, and it's also well organized. There's nothing random in it, and you used repetition very well.

Here's what I gathered from reading it, if it's true to what you intended then good job!:

-the character is feeling very strong emotions, too strong to put into words
-the character is confused, possibly feeling a variety of emotions that don't mix well
-the character is very, very overwhelmed, possible feeling alone due to not being able to convey their emotions with other people

If I had to find one thing to criticize here, it'd be the very last line, since for some reason I just feel like it doesn't hold the same meaning and rawness of the rest of the piece. Honestly though, that's just my opinion, so take that with a grain of salt.

Overall, I very much enjoyed this poem, and I hope to read more of your works in the future! Keep it up

I really like and relate to the message of this poem. I feel like this explains why writing is so hard some of the time. Finding a way to say how you feel can be difficult when you don't even know exactly how you feel. I like how your poem repeats "It's not easy to find the words..". It's simple yet meaningful. I feel like the last line could've been edited a bit more because I don't feel like it matches like the third and the sixth line do. This poem is amazing keep writing shit like this fr love it.