Hello soundofmind! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!Bold = grammar and flow issues.Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = removeUnderline = krazy Kara komments.
Hello! I really liked this poem! I like the consistent imagery and the idea of a trapeze.Here's one thing I noticed- the last line in the second stanza has rhythm issues. It might have been intentional, but with the second to last line in the second stanza having the same amount of syllables as the second to last line in the first stanza, the changing rhythm sounds a little awkward.You should try making "our old, forgotten, memories" and "expect the unforeseen" have the same amount of syllables.Other than that, this was a really good poem! I actually really enjoyed reading it. I love the first stanza, and how you used the tightrope. Keep writing!ella
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