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It seems like you are trying to paint a picture of a nighttime storm in the middle of the ocean. If so, you have done a good job, but you could also talk about how the waves kissed the skin of the people on the boat or something like that.
Just a slight grammar thing, "Swords swung silent" should be "Swords swung silently". Just silent doesn't quite sound right since it would make the most sense in the imperfect past. Also your tenses during the poem don't quite match up, so you should decide what tense you want to tell the story in.
Other than those few things, I think you are good to go
Points: 402
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