Hi there friend, I completely agree with the message this story conveys. It is relatable and truthful. Since the beginning of time the new generation sucks the past one was the best end of story. People never stop and think that the past wasn’t as perfect as it was to them. AKA the youtube comment section. However, this is not about annoying people this is about you. Your descriptions make it seem like the character and I are having a conversation. Keep doing that! It always good to include and relate to the reader. That is one of the benefits of short stories. However, your grammar needs work. Typos and mistakes are very common and plague all writers, so don’t feel bad. The first letter in a sentence has to be capitalized. Always. I also feel like maybe you should connect your sentences. Each because can connect a sentence. I know you want to avoid run on sentences, but try making your sentences a little longer. All and all great story and I think you would enjoy the book The Great Gatsby. It’s one of my favorites. Keep writing!
Points: 36
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