Hai Audi,
Ok, first of I'm actually gawking right now, like seriously. This poem was like 5 starts NO JOKE!!! I like it because the style is so unique that this doesn't sound like a poem, it sounds like those little books I used to read as a toddler. Like I am really starstruck and mind blown. Like can we all have a moment to appreciate this piece of work. Ok, OK. *calms down* Lets start with the downers. First off I absolutely agree with Rosey about the plot being funky. Another thing is I couldn't quite understand your technique. I mean I get all he motion and flow throughout the poem but the plot it was completely out of sight. The thing that completes your poem is the emotion. I feel so much right now. I feel like you have so much capability to be a poet unless you are one already. Anyways you are amazing and really deserve a trophy. This poem completely just made my day so Great Job!!! KEEP WRITING!!!!
Nidkits
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