The name of your poem reminds me of a Melanie Martinez song! Love the poem!
Hey Honey <3I'm here to review your poem, so let's get into it. Immediately, the first time I read this poem (I read over it a couple times before I decided to leave a review) I noticed the similarity and perhaps inspiration from Melanie Martinez. Now that's great but I'm looking at this poem as someone who doesn't see the connection and I have some issues. A madhouse is defined as a mental institution or asylum and while it can also mean a place of confusion and tumult I don't think it works. When I think of a madhouse I don't think of a circus. It doesn't make much sense to me but that's just my thoughts. I would either change madhouse to something else or even better (but harder) explain and show what makes carousels so mad. While you might link them with insanity, some might link them with a fun festival. In English we read Something Wicked This Way Comes and in that novel there is a carousel and that carousel is described in a way that makes it warped and disturbing. The music is playing backwards. It's creepy. This poem doesn't explain the carousel and it's horses in that light.
you're the only one keeping me sanein a madhouse of carousels spinninginside my mind of thoughts so unhinged.
the horses dance to the beat of my heart
as it races with fear and trepidation.
press the button―bring my terror to a haltbefore i shatter the stained glass above
and leaves stitches in your hands―the hands
that safely clasp my rubbled empathy.
Legacy here for a review.I love the concept of this poem and they way that you have presented it. You barely have any punctuation (which can be a stylistic choice), but keep in mind that it will be read faster with less places where the readers are forced to pause. You have this set up as one stanza (which is fine), but the words start to drag a little bit towards the end. I recommend making it into two separate stanzas after "as it races with fear and trepidation."You use a large vocabulary (which is a good thing), but some people might not be able to understand the words. Keep your audience in mind as you write. Overall, this is a good poem, but maybe a few minor changes before it is a final draft. Legacy
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