Legacy here for a review.I like how you compared death to a soul catcher and did not paint him as a negative or a positive entity. But I did not like how you kept it so short. I would like to see this expanded and explained more of how death does what they do and if they like doing it etc. I agree with cytochrome when they say that you don't need the italics when they are already stand alone lines. Overall, I would recommend some slight editing and expansion before this is a final draft. Legacy.
Heya!Since this is such a short poem I'm gonna give it a line by line and an overall conclusion to my feelings on this work. (forgive me if I mess up some bb code).
i travel the world as a
on the infinite conveyor belt
the abysmal excavation of oblivion
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