I think this is very deep and effective. I like the effect used at the end of the third stanza. However, if you are going to use a rhyming pattern, you should try to make it more regular, because it would help the flow of the poem. As well as this, I think you should also watch how many words you put in the stanza, because adding too little words can often ruin the flow of the poem, as seen in the second line of the fourth stanza. And since the name of the poem is 'The Wilting Rose', you could've made the girl have a colour hair that would correspond to a rose, like red or blonde (yellow). Overall, I think this poem is really emotional and very good, but you could add some implicit messages to make the poem better.
Points: 350
Reviews: 84
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