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You Are My Matchless Mate

by Ovais


Kiss me as you never before
Do it much better
That I must ask you for more

But one thing you keep it in your mind
I can never let myself for nasty
So, never plan to go on for dirty

I know, you have devoted yourself to me
But it doesn't mean
You begin to feel free

You know well who am I
If I'm your heart voice
Then you're also my elite choice

Though the sun blaze very hot
But when you came in front of it
It cools down on the spot

Whenever I say you're my flower
You replied, "You're its scent".
From others, this thing makes you different

No doubt you're my matchless mate
In any way and only with you
I have decided to make my fate.


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Fri Apr 21, 2017 1:59 pm
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CharlotteS wrote a review...



YES! This rhymed. I have been scrolling through so many poems looking for one I enjoy. And I found one. This one. :) I like the message and your language. It is a beautiful poem and I really enjoyed reading it. Is there someone who is your inspiration? Because if so they are a lucky human being. Anyway, enough of me being sappy and romantic. This was amazing! Loved it! And I hope to read more from you in the future.




Ovais says...


An honor to hear from you such nice words and yeah there's someone.



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Sun Apr 16, 2017 11:13 am
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Kimmycat wrote a review...



Hey,
This is good, I like it. I realized that every other stanza yup made the first and last lines ryhme. That was good. Something about your wording or your flow threw me off. It was a little hard to follow. The first two stanzas don't match very much with the rest of the poem. Other than that, it was a good poem.
I think with a few minor revisions you could really get this going.
Happy Easter
Keep Writing,
--♡♡Kimmy♡♡





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