Young Writers Society

Hello!

I really like this poem. The imagery is so beautiful, but also really describes the meaning of the painting well. I love how you describe the confusion in the sense of: how can something look so wonderful? I read this several times over because it was written so well, and I thought the descriptions were great. I thought "How can I not paint her?" was almost too repetitive, but it doesn't matter too much because the poem still worked really well with the repetition.

Sorry for the short review, but I don't have much time on my hands.

Nice work!

Evening sir/madam! I'm a fairweather user of this website, however I'd like to review this work.

Ah, the Scarlet Woman! The Whore of Babylon! The Prostitute of Chaos!
The title was immediately noticed by my occultic occipitial lobe.

In regards to the content of the poem, I'm aware that Rosetti's "Lady Lilith" painting was the main muse. I think the poem was superficial, praising, and fluffy as a result. However, you acknowledged this by categorizing it as "Romantic" and including the image, so I can't really dig into that.
I would like to see more of Lilith's story and history included, but that's just my cognitive bias revealing itself. You seem to have the ability to make compulsive seduction, child-sacrifice, and adultery with archangels somehow aesthetic. I'm interested to see where you could take it.

Either way, that's my admittedly useless review. It's our right as artists to tell other artists to piss off, so I couldn't blame you if you did.

Best wishes!

Hello, TheStormAroundMe.
This is Moonwatcher, and I'm here to review your poem.

Alright, so I'm kind of trying to ignore the painting at the top there. It'd make it kind of biased as to imagery, but even ignoring it you did a great job! I'm going to start off with a nitpick. You don't use any punctuation, yet you chose to use question marks. Any reason you chose to do so? I suggest using punctuation throughout the poem, or maybe removing it altogether. Another thingy, we kind of get the part where you say:

How can I not paint her?