Hi there, Luata here for a review. Like I've written in other reviews, the topics of depression and the such are commonly written about so the hard part is finding an original way to present the concept (which I am also guilty of) but I thought you had some really nice points for this poem.
For one, I like your rhyme scheme and rhythm. The whole things just really flows when I was reading it and sometimes that is a hard thing to achieve in a rhyming poem.
My favorite line were probably "Underneath the sass and smarm,
I'm more clay than I am stone"
I just wanted to tell you that I can completely relate to this poem and if you ever need any support, feel free to PM me or drop me a line on my wall.
Yours,
Luata
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