Young Writers Society

Hello, CHRISSY321. I loved this poem!! This is so cool...(pst. I think I have the YWS addiction too. It's spreading!) Really, it was soooo cute. I'm actually quite jealous. Thirty likes! Review time:

1st: I tell this to everyone. Capitalize the first word of every stanza... standard English peeps.

2nd: The 12th stanza is rather long. I can't really see a way to fix it but I'm sure you'll think of something.

3rd: This isn't a tip sorry... couldn't think of anything else. All the other reviews pretty much covered it.

This was so amazing! Cool! Clever! Realistic! It made me laugh it made me cry it made me stop crying... (I didn't really cry).

Keepwriting and never get discouraged! ...even if you have the YWS addiction!

~Keepwriting

Hi CHRISSY321, Felistia here with a review for you on this wonderful day.

Theme: I for one really like this poem, the rhymes and everything. I will say that it does feel a bit repetitive at times, but not so much that it gets on my nerves. I completely agree that it is very easy to get addicted to YWS and you expressed it very well in this poem.

Rhythm: For this poem I think the rhythm is really good. The one this I have to nit-pick about is the fact that the rhymes feel a bit forced every now and then. With a poem like this I think that is okay, but I still would look into maybe changing some of the rhymes so that they don't feel so forced. That is just a suggestion though.

Small suggestions: (throughly enjoying the works these writers write.) I think you meant to say (thoroughly) and I would replace (writers) with (people) so that it doesn't become repetitive.

Overall a great poem and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.

Your friend, Felistia.

Hello, Sunset here!
Wow, this was an amazing piece you've written. I'm not surprised that it got the spotlight. Most of the words were well chosen, and the rhyming was right on point. However, I have some editing, nitpicks, and just small corrections, that I would like to show.

I have been on YWS for a year just about,

and I have throughly enjoyed it here without a doubt!

Staying up reviewing to the late hours of the night,

throughly enjoying the works these writers write.

Spending all day just being on chat,

though when talking to people like Snazzy, Steam,Sweater, and Heather it is hard not to reply stat!

Fine, YWS, you win this round,
I can't drop this YWS addiction, to this you have found.

OMG!!! Chrissy you just spoke my heart. This poem it is perfect. I mean it's just... God... It's stunning. I'm a YWS addict too. I love the way your poem rhymes the way it flows and your choice of words. It's perfect.
You know what my she also threats to take my computer away *laughs*. And the best part is that I know she wouldn't so I continue to do all the stuff here.
I love to stay online here and do all the reviewing and stuff. I mean we really need a therapy to get over YWS (which according to me is not possible and even if such a miracle happen we will need a support group to get over the depression that will follow)
Thank you for writting such an amazing thing.
Fangirl ~

OMG!!! Chrissy you just spoke my heart. This poem it is perfect. I mean it's just... God... It's stunning. I'm a YWS addict too. I love the way your poem rhymes the way it flows and your choice of words. It's perfect.
You know what my Mom,she also threats to take my computer away *laughs*. And the best part is that I know she wouldn't so I continue to do all the stuff here.
I love to stay online here and do all the reviewing and stuff. I mean we really need a therapy to get over YWS (which according to me is not possible and even if such a miracle happen we will need a support group to get over the depression that will follow)
Thank you for writting such an amazing thing.
Fangirl ~

Hello!
I don't believe in perfection. Everything can always get better. That being said, this was pretty close to it. The rhymes really enhanced the whole thing, and all of us can relate. Anyway, time for the review!

the works these writers write.

I shall start to group,

I look at the homepage,

Fine, YWS, you win this round,

I can't drop this YWS addiction, to this you have found.

This is cute and really fun to read.
But alas! There is no cure for this addiction! Believe me, I know firsthand. XD

OK. Fine work. Good job.

As an active user of the site, I find what Nate did incredible and I love the community. However, if I felt the need to share that, a better way would be by posting it on my blog or on my wall. We get it, you love the site, but it seems like a reach for likes/waste of points more than anything else.

Hello, CHRISY321~
It's me, Swordfish, coming in for a very short review, as I am in a bit of a hurry >.>
I loved this poem, and trust me all of the review is a way to describe me! YWS really is in excellent site, and I think Nate really has a plan to suck us in. Who knows what he will do next. o-o
I guess this can fit in as a poem, but the formatting is weird. I find no mistakes, which really gives me not much to review. However, I must say that the poem is very comical, and let's admit, all of us need rehab.
As I repeat myself, I apologize for a short review and if you would like I'd be happy to give you a longer review sometime.
Your future therapist,
~Swordfish

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