Young Writers Society

I'll be reading this once before my exam in 4 days I'm sure!

Hello DrFeelGood!

Sec1218 here to review.

First off, I loved the structure of this poem! It is awesome! I also liked some of the metaphors and imagery you used such as: "His eyelids want to kiss eachother" and "watered down". I can also relate, which is a really good thing to be able to do in poetry. I also enjoyed how you did it in different times. Lastly, I liked how you refferred to the person taking the exam as a warrior, because, it's totally true! I feel like I'm fighting a battle when I'm studying for an exam.

I didn't understand the part where you wrote, "I know you're righting some insane fluff". Is that a pun? I also was confused from what point of view the poem was from. I feel as if you switched off from first person to third person to second person.

Overall, I enjoyed reading it and loved how relatable it was. Also it was formatted fantastically, and had great imagery and metaphors!

Keep up the great work!

~Sec1218

I love this poem. It is very accurate and I am sure everyone can relate. I loved the way you used the "eyelids kissing each other" metaphors in the second stanza. I could never come up with such an awesome one myself lol. Great job overall.

Hey DrFeelGood!!

This is Eros here to review this beautiful satirical poem!!

My heart is screaming, "WWWwooooooowwwwWW!!" It was a wonderful poem, really. The theme was too good. I loved this piece. I like the presentation of this poem too.
I like all the stanzas. They were really beautiful. It deserves appreciation. I like the way you have expressed the views of all the elements, Book, coffee, Facebook, Alarm Clock, Highlighter and the mattress. It was a really great work.

I am left speechless.
AWESOME work!
SUPERB work!
GREAT work!

Keep writing...
Because we all love to keep reding such awesoe works.
Have a great day/ night!

Hey! These folks did a great job reviewing. I just wanted to add how relatable this poem is to college students. As a matter of fact I have finals this week. I read the whole poem with a bit of laughter thinking about how true this it. I just thank you for writing this truly! It was such an encouragement. I feel like hey, I can do this.

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I just wanted to start off by saying I did enjoy reading this. Although I have no clear understanding what this is like (only studying for tests >.<), I feel the emotion of this poem. The topic is one I'm sure people can relate to, even at my age.

This line--

I am crying my heart out.

Hello, there, young writer. This is Margo Seuss for a review. Exams are tedious and full of trickery and deceit. Studying for them can often feel like a losing battle.

I like how you used personification for each item. Some favourites:

Alarm Clock:

I am crying my heart out.

He’s senselessly underlining even the copyright info.

Guardian here!

This is, quite frankly, clever poetry. Every high schooler and college student can directly relate to this. That is a sign of successful poetry; so hats off to you!

I hate correcting poetry, as it is more of an art than story-writing is. We all know that no one can correct the art of an artist-- or in this case, the poetry of a poet.

Here are the areas where you have succeeded:

- Relating to the audience... In this case, teens (for the most part)
- Setting up a great story that weaves perfectly into your poem
- Sectioning the poem... Putting the story into separate sections was quite a clever move. It allows the poem's plot to progress in a linear fashion.

I loved the way you compared the student to a warrior. Genius!

Keep up the awesome work and never give up!

-Guardian