Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well, this was quite a piece here, certainly manages to end on quite a cliffhanger there and it certainly does seem really interesting here and it definitely works pretty well as a prologue.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Minx ran. She ran faster than she has ever ran, not missing a step. She kept it consistent, gulping breaths without stopping. She didn’t understand, how could an innocent soul as herself be stuck in this situation, being chased by the offspring of death and unholiness itself. Her white dress was stained with dirt and mud, and the gold lines of the skirt had faded. She had to stop. Her long legs couldn’t handle anymore running. She didn’t have anywhere to hide, though. She couldn’t stop, but she had to. Minx stopped in her tracks and dropped on her hands and knees, gasping for breath. She didn’t care anymore. She looked behind her, and he was catching up to her. He was at least a head taller than her, he wore black, as his hair was, shaggy and unbrushed, he had a handsome face, but she wasn’t fooled by it. He was after her. He was the son of the creator of nightmares and fear, the one who kept children up at night, leaving them paranoid and afraid throughout the day. His name is Jinx. The one who gave them irrational fears of who knows what. And why was he after her? Why was she running so hard?
OKay...this is a very interesting start to a story here, not to mention this definitely appears to match that title quite well in terms of what's happening but it is still very mysterious in terms of what all of this could actually mean here. I do like the almost symbolic description there of the white dress being stained with mad as she mentions an innocent soul being chased by some form of manifestation of death or evil or something along those lines, it appears the figure chasing her is just meant to be the offspring of generally all things evil considering how they're introduced here. The last two questions though are very interesting, it almost seems like the writer is asking themselves that one there...and well...it certainly gets your attention as to why she would even ask herself those questions.
She was his opposite, and he hated that.
She was the daughter of the creator of dreams and happiness.
Well, that seems very opposite to nightmares indeed, oh wow, that is quite scary to see why she would be getting chased like that, especially as it appears that he does in fact hate her for the fact that the two of them are opposites. The plot certainly continues to thicken here...
Minx let him pull her up by her waist. He threw her over his shoulder and disappeared with her into darkness, leaving black sand-like particles behind him. It’s how he got from place to place.
And that was it. Minx knew this was the end for her.
But she didn’t expect what happened next.
Oh dear...it appears he managed to catch up to her there...doesn't look like this is going to end with anything good happening with the way that is structured right there...although the line at the end does give you a bit of pause there wondering if perhaps just maybe she would survive after all, although of course it could just mean her end was a lot crueller than she imagined it to be.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, a pretty solid little prologue here, after seeing this I would certainly read on from here. Aaaand, that's about all I've gotta say here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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