Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Okayy...this was an interesting piece here, it has a slightly weird flow to it, but on the whole it was mostly just really mysterious here with the things that went on in there...and well, it certainly makes for a pretty darn good start to a story here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Darkness, that's all there was. Every last bit of dreadful thought and action seemed to resonate off of the malnourished trees, forming a useless canopy in the jungle. Through all of the death, deception, and darkness there was an opening to a blissful beach that appeared to caress every last definition of beauty itself. It wasn't at all beautiful, but it gave that appearance in this dimension. Rough sand, black as tar, could be seen for thousands of miles, bonding with a deep, blood red, sea. The beach complimented itself perfectly. There on the beach, alone on the black sand, lay a single soul. That was me.
Okay...wow, that is a very much blackened and just generally dead sounding beach there, it just seems like the whole place is almost dying somehow with the imagery being put out there, and then the fact that this appears to be something that's considered beautiful in that dimension, it makes you wonder just how bad the dimension in general might be. At any rate, this is a really cool little description to start on here. Not to mention of course the fact that it appears we have just one person stranded on there telling us this story here.
I awoke on the beach, panting, then calming to a steady normal breath after looking around. I couldn't get up, I couldn't move the major muscles in my body. At first I panicked, speeding up my breathing pattern once more. Then something struck my mind, and it instantly became one of the most relaxing things I could imagine. Something of sexual proportions. Then I began to feel it slowly move around my body. I started to feel its life source persuading me. Talking me into staying. Convincing me to change into grains of black sand like them. I could feel them taking over my mind, and slowly dissolving the clothes from my body.
Well...that has to be one of the weirder attacks that I've read about, it does sound relatively deadly though although the description makes it a little bit on the tougher side to try and place here. But on the whole it looks like someone or something is trying to take over the mind of this person which is certainly a pretty scary thing there...well, let's see where this is headed.
It stopped abruptly and a chill shot up my spine at the realization of where I was. I scrambled to my feet, regaining my consciousness, and the animated sand scurried off in a ripple after every step as I ran inland away from the beach. I stood there, shocked and trembling at the sight of the beach. My breaths were heavy and short. I looked down the mile long coast both ways, then down to the horizon, relishing at the astonishing sunset. I turned around in all directions like a dog chasing its tail. I stared at the sights, calmed my breathing pattern, and took a long, deep breath of the cold, sharp air. It felt like a million sharp knives shooting up my nostrils, but I loved it.
Okay...this took yet another crazy turn there...with this sudden and very scary sounding mental attack giving way to this person just relishing the sights of what's not exactly the most picturesque of beaches as they run around. Certainly not the sort of situation you expect but well I suppose you did mention this was a dream and this kind of sudden switching does make sense as far as that's concerned. Well let's see where this goes next I suppose.
I listened to the silence, paid attention to it, then as expected, cringed at the whispers of the sand creeping through my skull. I knew where I was, and there was no denying which dimensional hole I had slipped through. I was excited and terrified, wanting to scream with glee but at the same time lay down and cry. I'd landed in the middle of a time and place I thought was only a legend. I needed to get inland and find a town, the sunset was beautiful, but nightfall wasn't.
Okay...well that was an interesting ending there...not sure what they mean by dimensional hole there but it certainly does sound pretty interesting, as does the fact that it appears this place becomes quite dangerous after nightfall, well, an interesting point to end things off here, and this does couple with that title to indicate there might be a pretty cool dimensional travelling sort of premise going on here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this was a pretty neat start to a story here, certainly caught my attention and this is perhaps something that I would read too...certainly seems quite mysterious here.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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