Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!!
First Impression: Well...this was quite a powerful little story here...you've certainly done a great job with the mystery building up there and then final that grand reveal where its implied our protagonist here will meet some sort of sticky end...just very nicely done here.
Anyway let's get right to it,
I watch him every day. He wears beautiful tailored suits and polished shoes. Eagle-featured with perfect hair, dark and slicked back with a widows peak. His skin is pale with not a wrinkle in sight. He is almost supernaturally flawless. Such a magnificent man. I understand why women adore him. He comes down the stairs a little after dark.
He flashes me a smile as he hands me his key. I stay professional and try to stop myself from blushing. He tells me he gives me his key when he leaves and retrieves it when he comes back just so that he can talk to me. My partner behind the counter sends me a look telling me to stop dilly-dallying. I place his key in the numbered box and watch him leave.
Well...that's quite an interesting start that we've got here...definitely gets your attention as a reader. The emotions on the part of the women and how things work around her as she's standing there...it all blended together really well here to bring to life a very realistic picture here and I am loving it so far.
He comes back with a different woman every night. He winks at me when he retrieves his key and retreats to his room, wrapping his slender arm around the woman’s slim waist. All the girls have something in common. They are all stunningly beautiful and wear a gold necklace that is so monstrously thick it resembles a rope. A noose around their neck. The necklace reflects the light off the crystal chandelier that hangs overhead and it bounces around the walls. All eyes watch him. But no one sees what he is.
Well...this dude certainly has quite an air about him, and all these descriptions are lending themselves beautifully to conveying that.
I clean his room after every week and someone else takes my place at reception. He is immaculate. Everything is so precise it doesn’t need my touch. But I stay anyway. I enjoy a little snoop. He has a jewellery box sat on the desk. I open it and see several rings. Women’s rings. They are all so different. Some with lustrous stones, some cheap and tacky. The rope-like necklace is also in there - wound round like a serpent protecting its treasure. How strange I thought it was at first. How every woman had the exact same necklace and that he also has a copy. But then I realised, there was only one necklace. The one in the jewellery box. He would give it each woman at the start of the night to show them that they had been chosen and then he would take it back from them when he was finished.
Well we're definitely tapping into something somewhat supernatural there...this necklace definitely has quite an air of mystery about it...definitely has a lot of mystery behind all this and I love that. Also immaculate rooms....those are always signs of something mysterious...we all now this.
“You know what’s strange?” my partner at the desk asks when he disappears up the stairs with another woman in his arm.
“What’s that?” I look over at her. She is an old woman. A lot older than me. Married with two kids. Crow’s feet around her eyes.
“I never see those women leave. I’ve asked around, no one has,” she says nodding up the staircase.
SEE...immaculate rooms and supernatural necklaces are bad news....they always have been and they always will be....oh dear...well let's see how this ends up going.
“Funny that,” I reply, sounding disinterested but the words seemed to strangle my heart. I’m not curious like her. I had opened Pandora’s Box and I had learnt the secret.
One day, at dusk, like clockwork he sashays down the stairs and meets me at my counter. He places his elbows on the countertop and leans in to me. He is so close I can see my reflection in his dilated pupils. My breath comes out as a quiver. My heart is beating so heavy it seems to echo round the room. I should be fearful but he is still so alluring. There is silence. The tension between us is palpable. He then tucks his hand into his breast pocket and pulls out the gold necklace. He lets it dangle in the air between us. I study it in awe.
“You’re next,” he whispers. A chill runs up my spine. You know what they say about chills, don’t you? Someone has just walked over my grave.
Well...crap...that was one powerful ending there...oh dear...definite chills down my spine from reading through this thing...well...well..well some really powerful writing here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Well...not too much left for me to say down here. It was definitely a great read. The story just comes together so well here. Well anyway that's all I've gotta say for now.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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