Hello CapitalMonday here for a review. i like to begin that i love the way you repeat allegory throughout this poem as a message or as something like a repetition of effect to create a beat for the reader to read. Also i would think that many people could relate since we (all) might have felt like we could hide our feelings, stabbing out arms with sadden thought or crying alone in the bathroom, without a thought of the world, that no one cared.
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doesn't quite fit me as a favorite. I mean it seems to be to closed ending (if that makes sense).The dizziness she felt?/ Watching her sway before/ dropping so suddenly?
Overall, I would think we all have that one friend who was sad forever and during that time when they are sad they start to cut or take pills. My friend did that, after her dad had died, and every night she would call me saying how she had cut or how much she wished she could have died. i tried to talk her out of it yet she had said no to me and one day, at school, she never came. This poem reminds me of her, and how my friends missed the warning signs of her killing herself just to be with her dad.
Farewell,
CapitalMonday
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