Hello CapitalMonday here for a review. i like to begin on well-written this poem is since you make amazing reasons on how everyone chooses life. I believe everyone could follow this/agree to this since we all have wondered what everyone else is thinking.
I have a few nitpicks about this:
I think you should have made into a separate stanza for each line also feel like there is an internal rhyme within this poem due to it beat that it has.
Like, super sophisticated If you could maybe change this up a bit/delete this part since it is almost repeating what you said in the previous stanza above that one.
Man! I'm lost I don't think that exclamation mark was needed there in the middle of a sentence since it doesn't add style to it. Leave it as I'm lost also the three dots at the end make it seem like you are not done writing this poem.
When I remember though, I don't know what to do this is a little confusing since you are basically contradicting yourself (in a sense) since you have no idea what to do while thinking.
Unlike the things i said above, i believe that this poem has its good ideas too. i like the whole poem itself and how at the beginning you use question words then comply those who read this to answer/listen to what you have to say.
Farewell,
CapitalMonday
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