Hello, love! Aurora here with a quick review for you!
Alright. I didn't find any spelling errors, so let's move on, shall we?
the lingering remnants of the past brought forth
You already have 'the' at the beginning of the sentence. Why don't you change the second 'the' to 'a'? Just a suggestion
It would also be nice if you added an extra space between the last line and the second-to-last line
Hatred's despised caress
Instead of despised, you should consider changing it to 'sweet' or 'enchanting'. It a lot easier to hate someone than love them.
hearts broken and minds wavered
'wavered' just sounds odd. Maybe manipulated?
That's all. I like the theme of the poem and the way you build the mood.
Keep writing, love.
Aurora
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