I like the idea that you are going with by being representative but I think this might be a little to representative. I want to understand more of your emotion and different ideas and analogies with the flowers. That is by far my favorite part I love your flower analogies, so I would just like to see more. Like what did he do or how did you feel all of time or just little things like that. I really did like this poem but you have room to create something even better. I can't wait to see more of your writing.
Keep up the creative writing!
-Roxie Rain
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