Hello, CesareBorgia, here for a review,
I really liked this poem, but there are some qualms. Because you are eleven though, it makes it better since you are so good.
And the sparkle of yor beak.
Sorry if I sound like an annoying editor, but it's supposed to say, "your" instead of "yor".
The artistic skill in your feathers is amazing,
The colors red, yellow, and orange
That shine with your fiery blast
Are truly mesmerizing.
I would change this too;
The artistic skill of the feathers that adorn
your body is truly amazing,
the colors of red, yellow, and orange that
run down your back in a fiery blast,
is awe-inspiring
That's all I have to say for today,
Best of luck in writing,
CesareBorgia,
signing out.
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