Hi francesca!
Boy, am I a fan of Maya Angelou, so I clicked on this poem hoping for great things.
However, poetry is supposed to say something new, or something in a new way, at least. This doesn't really say anything new or insightful about Ms. Angelou. It only lists a few of her excellent qualities. That's nice, but it's not really effective as a poem.
To make this poem more effective, you can try adding more details and examples of how Ms. Angelou helped "colours of all skin" and how she was "a lady of wisest words". Perhaps focusing more on what she did instead of her herself would help.
An interesting thing to do would be to write this poem in the style of Ms. Angelou herself. I know that it's hard to imitate, but I think that it would be a strong choice. Read some more of her poetry and get a feel for her style. It relied many times on vivid imagery and repetition.
This poem doesn't say anything about how she advocated for women in her poetry, and that was a huge part of it. If you do nothing else, include this.
Try adding imagery and details to get the reader to feel something. I didn't really. I mean, I thought about her, and how nice she was, but perhaps document her struggles in life. Write a biographical poem with imaginative filling of the gaps in history. I think that that would be more poignant than simply two stanzas of praise for this remarkable woman, when she deserves a lot more than two stanzas.
Altogether, I like whom you have chosen to write about, but the execution needs a little polishing. I hope that this review proves useful to you! Merry writing, and happy fahrvergnügen!
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