It's joallover here! And all I can say is
Woah.
There are lines in this that I absolutely loved, almost to the point of humor.
Oh, what a brave hero I am!
"Would you like some lies with that?"
I crackle at the scene with glee
It's almost like black humor, I love it! You have admirable word choice and points that are extremely valid and realistic. I love it!
I don't have any nit picks, but I have to make one point.
Higher,
bigger,
faster,
quicker!
That reminded me of the Lorax scene when the last tree falls down and the onceler is saying he will keep biggering and biggering and biggering
You did an amazing job with this, keep writing!
-joallover
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