Hello! Clarice Arrais here.
OMG, I liked it so much! It was like a breeze to my brain (after so much reading and writing in here). You skillfully did it. The way you brake the images with TASTES... I loved it. I actually felt it in my tongue (this was weird and nice).
"the rhythmic words in only the best of ways fuzzy memories, distinctive tastes
cucumber, ketchup,remember?"
You built a strong poem. You used thoughts, sounds, images, tastes... It is so rich in sensations.
If I would change something, it was: always start the sentences with capital letters and I would have extended it in the smell section.
It is like the Grand Finale is missing somehow.
Keep writing poems! You can do great things. ^^
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