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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
In the town of Winters Fall , Maria Rosalee was getting ready for her tenth birthday and all of her family members were soon to come. She quickly put on her favorite red and black , short-sleeved dress. Maria put her hair up in ponytail and started to walk to the door of her bedroom ; but turned back around to get her favorite teddybear , Mr. Brown Bear.
"Maria,hurry up." Maria turned to see that her mother was in the doorway waiting for the birthday girl to walk up to her. Maria knew her mother was a women that didn't have enough patience to wait on her child.
Well, this is one of the more unique opening that I've ever managed to come across for an opening chapter here...we have ourselves on one hand what is a very wholesome sounding moment, but it also is followed immediately after by a very concerning moment too there...cause while tenth birthday parties and teddy bears suggest this is going to be quite wholesome, the title we have here along with the statement about this person's mother just raises a few red flags right here.
"Yes,ma'am! I am coming this minute." Maria walked out of her bedroom as her mother took away Mr.Brown Bear."Give him back!"
"A lady shouldn't care such a thing to her birthday." Maria's mother tossed the bear into the child's room , but it froze before it touched the floor. It made its way to Maria and it landed into her hands.
Well that little scene just made everything ten times more interesting there. On one hand, it looks to be establishing the personality of the mother quite solidly there as someone that appears to be quite strict towards our protagonist, bordering on being a little too strict almost although she doesn't appear to be malicious at the moment. We also see that Maria seems to have some sort of telekinetic ability there with the whole teddy bear returning to her scene. That one absolutely gets your attention here and makes you want to find out more.
"Touch Mr. Brown Bear again and i'll......" Before Maria could finish, her father picked her up.Maria's anger subsidded as her father began tickling her. "Papa...You made it!"
"Of course! I wouldn't miss it for the world!"Maria wrapped her small arms around her father's neck and gave him a big squeeze. After a minute of hugging his daughter, Maria's father then looked at her mother. The stared at each other so passionatly that even Maria could tell that they still liked each other. The one question she had was; Why did they leave eack other?
Aaand we have even more things being revealed here. We have a bit of a divorce situation where Maria seems to suspect there's something sneaky going on behind the reasoning for that and well, there's just a myriad of things to think about here as we come to end which is perfect for part one of a story here.
Overall, this was a pretty solid way to start off a story here, I'd say it has more than enough to keep someone wanting to read more of the story...and it does a pretty decent job of getting the main characters introduced here. It seems like a story I'd read at any rate.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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