Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
I the nights cool air the sounds of joy and happiness rang through the town. All through the town men sang and women dance and the same children played. tonight was a celabration for good tiding. But I was not here to sing or dance, no i was on a quest. I walk to the little tavern and sat down to a nice glass of Mead. I drank the first glass and asked for another. it wasn't long before I was drunk as any man but I still had a clear head. I stumbed out of the tavern and walked to the inn where I was spending the night. I looked around the little room and sat on the bed. I the undressed and got under the blankets and fell into a deep sleep. The next morning I had a Terrible headache from the previous night. So I went down stairs and got a cupof black coffee and a small shot of brandy. I then walked back to the inn and gather my stuff. I looked onto the road and started on averylong journey.
Hmm, well judging by the "to be continued" I'm assuming this is some sort of first chapter or prologue that you've got right here...although this is kind of small if you were planning on considering this to be a first chapter.
Moving right to what happens here, we get the sense of someone that's setting out what looks to be a pretty important journey, or at least a long one I suppose as mentioned there. It does go off on a bit of a tangent though I'd say at the start of things. It doesn't quite seem like the whole thing is headed towards the journey there and that makes this not quite as good as it could be here. It kind of takes away from the whole setting out on a long and important journey part when we just have someone talking of random people singing and dancing and then proceeds to drink themselves to a hangover as well. I feel like this could have honestly just started at the person working up after the hangover and it would still have pretty much the exact same effect as this one currently has.
Overall, we've got ourselves a pretty nice sounding premise here, but, there's a few things you need to consider about what exactly you want this beginning to be conveying here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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