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Tue Feb 16, 2021 7:17 pm
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Yoshikrab says...



that would really push amelia's buttons

it's a really good idea, but waaaay too dramatic

just have rose trip over a rock or the air or cloud's shoe or something and then get a minor concussion so she can't continue
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Tue Feb 23, 2021 7:42 pm
winterwolf0100 says...



Okay @ChesTacos I think you’re up next with Charlotte! : D
  





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Tue Feb 23, 2021 8:49 pm
ChesTacos says...



Wait, I'm a little confused, what are we doing to rose?
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Tue Feb 23, 2021 9:09 pm
winterwolf0100 says...



I believe Yoshikrab may have said something a few messages ago saying what to do. I believe they suggested just having her trip on something or the like, and her getting a minor concussion so she’s unable to continue.
  





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Tue Feb 23, 2021 9:19 pm
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ChesTacos says...



shall i incorporate that in my post?
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Tue Feb 23, 2021 9:26 pm
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Yoshikrab says...



yes
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Sun Feb 28, 2021 3:31 pm
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ChesTacos says...



Sorry it took me so long to post I'll do it soon
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Sun Feb 28, 2021 3:43 pm
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ChesTacos says...



Also, do I include Thomas and Charlotte in one post or just Charlotte?
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Sun Feb 28, 2021 4:00 pm
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Yoshikrab says...



@ChesTacos probably just one at a time
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Sun Feb 28, 2021 4:24 pm
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winterwolf0100 says...



Yeah, since we’re going alphabetically and Thomas isn’t next after her then probably just Charlotte
  





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Tue Mar 02, 2021 2:30 pm
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ChesTacos says...



I finished it

(Charlotte may have left the training grounds but everyone else is still there so it shouldn't have too big of an impact)
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Tue Mar 02, 2021 2:44 pm
winterwolf0100 says...



Hey @ChesTacos! The post looks good! I had a few suggestions, but they’re optional and more to keep the consistency of the story going than anything.

They haven’t been assigned rooms yet or gotten their things from the plane, so it might be difficult for her to find her instrument and go somewhere to play. Rosetta is also technically next alphabetically, so it might make more sense if he called out for Rosetta to go and then she did something like slur her speech and revealed she had a concussion?

The only other thing I’d say is that I don’t think Aiden would say it was “cool.” You were right in that he would most certainly think that, but he’s trying to get Charlotte to trust him. It’s not working, but he’s trying, and he wouldn’t say it was cool because Rosetta is one of the only people who currently trusts him there, and he wouldn’t want to push her away.

Those are just thoughts but yeah. It looks great overall, so bravo! I’m seeing now that Thomas is up next so I guess you’ll be posting again.
  





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Tue Mar 02, 2021 3:23 pm
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Ok I'll edit the post

Also what do you think Aiden would say instead?
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Tue Mar 02, 2021 3:31 pm
winterwolf0100 says...



He’d probably say something like “I can’t believe Catherine gave her a concussion.” He’d say it just loud enough for Catherine to hear, but he’d say it in a sincere way where it really sounded like he couldn’t believe it.
  








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