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@TheSilverFox please jump on this wagon with me.


@Ventomology: do the thing
me: okay

Alright, I've had this story kinda floating around in my head the last couple months, but it only really took shape Thursday. I'm also a bit exhausted from the plot tangle that is BATP, so I present

Past the Breakers

Queer Romance with Magical Foxes



The Backstory:

There's only two things I can write: high fantasy and vaguely creepy poetry. This obviously isn't poetry; it's actually distantly related to BAtP (distant enough that this story probably won't become a plot tangle too). Long story short, The Creator barged into an empty dimension, created a universe (yay!), made a family out of his AI partner and a few people he grew out of vats (yay?), got on the nerves of a remnant from the last universe (not yay!), picked a fight, won, etc. The Creator looked at what was left from that fight and decided "you could make a world out of this," so that's what he did. He populated one continent with humans, and another continent with all the less violent and volatile creatures The Creator and his enemy had made.

And it was all going great, but the humans were too busy worshiping The Creator to do anything useful or productive. He wasn't a big fan of that, so he offered some humans the chance to get on boats and sail over to the other continent. Oh, and then he lifted the human continent up into an alternate dimension/'heaven' thing, but that's not really important right now.

What matters is that there was now a bunch of empty ocean, blocked off from the other continent by some pretty big walls. The Creator also wasn't sure what to do with some of the more violent and volatile creatures he and his enemy had made. So, he decided to kill two birds with one stone by making a new continent (ugh, so many continents), and sticking them on it.

A couple millennia later, those creatures mellowed out some, so might as well see what they're up to.

The Setting:

The story is set in and around a village of kitsune by the coast. By village, I mean a group of grass-roofed adobe houses grouped kinda closely together, surrounded by farmland. They grow wheat and corn, since, despite being next to the sea, the place doesn't have super fertile soil (think the white cliffs of Dover). Also some sheep and cows grazing around, because why not.

By kitsune, I essentially mean bipedal foxes who grow additional tails about every 12 years or so. Their magical power increases with every tail, maxing out with the 9th (though no one's really lived long enough to see what that having nine tails might be like). The older the kitsune, the stronger they are, which actually relates to the only form of government the village has. Foxes with more than a couple tails usually rally together as warriors if the village is ever attacked, with the one having the most being the head of the guard. Head of the guard is not a prestigious position, and it rarely comes up, but it's the closest thing to a leader the town has.

And by coast, I mean a set of cliffs with the occasional sandy beach and inlet. It's not exactly a safe place, even if you don't consider all the big and dangerous creatures swimming around in there.

The Characters:

Xain (pronounced basically like Zane), a two-tailed kitsune. A fisherman in a time and place where nobody else wants to even go near the water, he lives in what used to be his parents' house, a little ways from the village. When his parents died of illness, he and his sisters moved closer to the village, but he found it wasn't quite to his liking. Now he goes fishing with his father's rod, line improvised from some of the clothes his oldest sister sends him, and a spear. Otherwise, he's generally busy keeping the house clean, fending off his concerned and controlling sisters, and being insecure. Getting close to growing his third tail.

Idiot (placeholder name until I can find a good one), who is an idiot. Also a fox, which is a pretty important distinction. He has one tail, a pretty fixed amount of magical ability, and is the sole character not from this continent. An adventure who had wide eyes and a lot of money, but now finds himself a little jaded and a lot broke. Getting stranded in a strange place with people who don't understand a word he says can do that to someone. Likes maps, keeps tons of drawing and notes about everything and everyone he runs into. Just a little bit of an ego.

Yisele, a two-tailed kitsune and Xain's older sister. Very friendly, chaotic, happy-go-lucky person. Social butterfly of the village, keeps trying to get Xain to come back and embrace all the uncertainty and fear of being outside his parents' home. Xain likes to think he has enough uncertainty and fear already.

Yisele's wife, a three-tailed kitsune. Daughter of the head of the guard (who has five tails). Adorably romantic and good at punching things, an effective combination.

Verta, a three-tailed kitsune and Xain's oldest sister. Mother of two. The calm and rational sister who decided to take it on herself to keep her siblings safe. Which means she can be pretty controlling and harsh, though she's extremely defensive of her family. Got Xain to work on her husband's farm for a bit, hasn't stopped trying to get him back there. Picked up weaving from her husband, and usually makes clothes for the villagers. Was a warrior once or twice, has the scars to show for it.

Verta's husband, a three-tailed kitsune and Xain's brother-in-law. Father of two. Doesn't talk too much, but generally a friendly and calm person. Definitely the person Xain goes to when he wants to get his sisters off his back.

The Plot: Not too sure? Right now I just have idiot washing up on shore, befriending Xain, them overcoming mutual language barriers, Xain's sisters showing up, etc. Oh, and bipedal saber-tooth tigers who grow fangs so large they can accidentally impale themselves, and definitely won't show up to cause havoc down the road. But, whatever I decide to do, assuming an 18+ rating from the start probably should help.

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S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse
a persona che mai tornasse al mondo,
questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse.
Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo
non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero,
senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.

Inferno, Canto 27, l 61-66.
  





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Mon Jul 29, 2019 4:48 pm
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Magestorrow says...



I know you're not entirely sure what the plot is going to be, but this story sounds awesome and I can't wait to see whatever you're scheming for it! Do you know where you'll be posting it for LMS?

And, even more importantly, how long do I have to wait before a character from this shows up in a roleplay?
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What you do makes a difference,
and you have to decide what kind
of difference you want to make.”

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@Magestorrow: haha I just plotted the entire thing out earlier today, so there's been a lot of scheming going on.

I'm not sure if I'm posting it in this thread or actually publishing it? On one hand, publishing makes it a little easier for people to find than just posting it here, but I also have a habit of taking reviews super seriously and stressing out over them. So yeah, I'mma just wait until September before I figure out what I want to do.

Maybe not for a little while! This novel is super new, and I need to get a little more comfortable with the characters before throwing them in some RPs. They would be pretty entertaining, though.
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse
a persona che mai tornasse al mondo,
questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse.
Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo
non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero,
senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.

Inferno, Canto 27, l 61-66.
  





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Whoop, should probably write an update to this - setting's set up, plot's plotted, characters are planned out, this novel should be pretty smooth sailing when I get to writing it.

More of the Backstory: Obviously, the kitsune isn't the only sentient species on the continent. There's quite a few scattered around, but the real power player in the area (and the one that's going to come up most often) is the saber-toothed tigers. They carved out a territory to the northwest, fighting rival groups like the dire wolves and consolidating their power. These days, they're a bit like the Vikings - largely farmers and settles who've established a semi-stable set of kingdoms over the lands they've occupied, while raiders and adventurers attack the surrounding area and/or create the foundations for new kingdoms. I'll switch between saber-tooth tiger and tiger for the sake of convenience, so fair warning.

The dire wolves used to be prominent rivals, but lost their power after a long series of wars with the tigers. The last war saw their capital destroyed, their population enslaved, and their warriors exiled to a far away island that definitely won't be relevant in the story.

More of the Plot:

Idiot and his idiot decisions end up guiding a lot of the plot. Whether shooting a gun to scare off a monster, selling some of his notes to a trader, or keeping a really detailed account of the equipment that he used to get to this continent in the first place, he ends up setting a lot of things in motion. Not that it's really his fault. Unfortunately, idiot and Xain have to deal with a lot of the consequences.

When it is idiot's fault, it's mostly because of his internal struggle. Part of him wants to go back home a successful, beloved adventurer, while the other part of him is coming to terms with what could happen if those two continents know each other exists. That's the heart of the plot, essentially.

More of the Characters:

Leader of the Raiders, who is the leader of the raiders. Saber-toothed tiger, very leader-y and calm under pressure. Maybe he should get more character development?

Jerk, who has a much less polite name in my notes. Village tiger who decided he was a big fan of the raiding and signed up. Is fluent in both the tiger and kitsune language, which is rich for someone who regularly wears kitsune fur.

Jerk's mom, who is not a jerk. Lived in the village with her son as her only surviving family member, and he ended up dragging her along into the raiding business. She's old, extremely disinterested in anything her son does, and a healer.

Shipbuilder, who builds ships. A village tiger who got hired to build a ship. Kind of a bigot for someone who knows the kitsune language.

Oichi, a nine-tailed kitsune. Nine-tailed kitsunes typically have so much magic/energy that they lose their corporeal form, which they definitely always take well.

Aaand a couple more characters who would probably be even more spoilery than these ones.

Ugh a month to go before I start writing. ;-;
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse
a persona che mai tornasse al mondo,
questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse.
Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo
non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero,
senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.

Inferno, Canto 27, l 61-66.
  








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