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Sat Feb 11, 2017 12:14 am
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Conics Unfortunately


Guess what! I'm doing LMS again. Is there anyone else who will have participated in all three rounds?

But that's probably not what you're in this thread for, so I shall get a move on.

Conics Unfortunately is not serious. (Or it's the most serious thing ever, but you have to dig through a lot of empty space to get there.) But mostly, it's just a dump of sarcasm and teen antics and--okay, I might intend to discuss race, gender, orientation, etc.

Of course, the idea of aliens lends itself to those discussions. Fed up with the number of humanoid overlord aliens out in the literary universe (especially ones that are basically people with gross faces), I decided to play around with the possibilities. In Conics, Ellipse meets all kinds of aliens, from the humanoid to the very amorphous. The captain of her ship is a photosynthesizing bundle of hydraulically operated stems with a brain. Her best friend is practically a mermaid.

I mean to create abundant diversity of alien species, and then take it a step further and make sure that aliens, like Earthlings, have diversity within their own species.

And the end result? A hero's journey that takes place in a universe overflowing with acceptance. The aliens are not substitutes for human diversity; they compliment it and help it grow by demonstrating the possibilities, and Earthlings do the same for other intelligent life.

Conics is about a place where being inclusive is the norm. No character is defined by their race or gender, and the only questioning of someone's identity comes from healthy culture sharing between species. The existence of characters who are POC, LGBT, or disabled is recognized but not fussed over. No one is all that weird, because--let's face it--everyone is pretty darn strange.

As to why I'm choosing to build this world?

I want Earth to be like it someday.


Synopsis:
Chapter List:
The MVPs:
The Ships and their Crews:
Who's That Character?

The Journal:
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They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Sat Feb 11, 2017 12:16 am
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Synopsis:

After being chased through customs by bounty hunters, Ellipse stows away on a small-scale trading vessel named the Conics, and of course, it just so happens that this humble little ship is transporting possibly the greatest technological innovation ever: a device capable of communication that transcends space-time.

Or, you know, an intergalactic cell phone.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Sat Feb 11, 2017 12:21 am
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The MVPs:

Ellipse - A girl from Titan who isn't entirely sure why she's being chased by bounty hunters. She was born Elliott Bei, and sometimes uses the alias Ellie Tibot, which is a horrible pseudonym and probably how the bounty hunters found her in the first place.

Focci - A diploid from Sirena who sorta kinda built the intergalactic cell phone. Only he calls it the Miniature Fold Device, which sounds stupid. Also he's like a mermaid, so when he moves around, he has to do the seal flop. It is hilarious.

Tejal Sethi - Focci's inventing/no-leg-having rival. He also works as a bounty hunter because that is what his adoptive parents do for a living, and he still lives with them on their ship.
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"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Sat Feb 11, 2017 12:49 am
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The Ships and their Crews:

The Conics - a small trading vessel built by the Specifus. Its business specialties are the transport of delicate materials and small-scale shipping operations, like when vendors need to ship supplies to conventions.

Crew:
  • Maj - Captain
  • Min - First Mate
  • Wrecktrix - Combat Specialist
  • Focci - Technician
  • Mouthbot - Translator
  • Ellipse - Cook

The Ink - the spaceship version of a trailer and a sports car's illicit love child. It is prime for use by bounty hunters, though it was originally a rich dude's recreational vehicle. Tejal may have made a few teensy tiny modifications.

Crew:
  • Shell - Captain
  • Crane - First Mate
  • Tejal - Technician

The RV Impending - a research vessel about the same size as the Conics and capable of splitting into two smaller ships. They went missing about a month ago while testing space-time-transcending communications for Valor Tech.

Crew:
  • Iso - Captain
  • Max - First Mate
  • Ami - Head Researcher
  • Fid - Researcher
  • Nov - Researcher
  • Tox - Emergency Specialist
  • Soph - Technician

The UNGS Bellevue - a large military vessel read: gargantuan monstrosity capable of carrying thousands of smaller dogfighting ships. It is owned and operated by the Earth's United Nations, and mostly keeps within Earth's solar system.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Thu Feb 16, 2017 6:58 am
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Intelligent Species:

Because many extraterrestrial languages do not rely on the same set of sounds as Earth languages, alien names and places have been translated or simply ignored in favor of Earth names.

Earthlings:

I sure hope y'all know some stuff about humans.

Sirens:

Sirens are a lot like the earthling idea of mermaids. They communicate primarily through sound, and while some Siren languages include clicks, whistles, and barks, most are composed solely of notes from a one-octave chromatic scale. Some older languages also included half-tones, but those are quickly dying out, as the chromatic scale is easier and surprisingly universal.

Because Sirena goes through periods of extreme drought on a regular basis, Sirens are capable of life on land. They are ill-suited to it, however, and cannot breathe well, because they must use their swimbladders as lungs. Additionally, fish tails do not make for easy movement on land.

Sirens do have opposible thumbs, but have an extra finger as well, and webbing between digits. When flexed, their arms are fin-shaped. Siren faces seem to earthlings to be a mix between a human's, a seal's, and a basilisk lizard's, because they possess snouts, forward-facing eyes, a few scales over the membrane, and large neck fins, which help to receive vibrations.

Gato:

Gato resemble earthling cats, with a few notable differences, such as their twin prehensile tails, over-sized heads, small ears, and vegetarian teeth. They also happen to be fluffier than the average cat. Most are the size of cougars, but some grow to as large as tigers. They range in color from blue-black to ice-white and possess heavy coats of fur.

Before the ice-age that currently reigns over their planet took hold, the Gato were a prey species, and they developed early intelligence and group tendencies in order to avoid being eaten. Once the ice-age took effect, their fur helped them outlast their predators, and they further developed intelligence while learning to generate food sources.

Specifus:

A sentient photosynthesizing species. They are generally red in color, as their photosynthetic processes rely on green and blue light frequencies, but some rare individuals come in yellow or pink.

Like large earthling photosynthesizers, the Specifus are plant-like. They lack specific muscle structures and instead grow and kill vine-like branches in order to maximize survival rates.

Amoebus:

Though individuals of this species are not particularly sentient, masses of Amoebus form amorphous ship-beings capable of sentient thought. They quickly outgrew their planet and rove around their home system, with groups of Amoebus constantly fighting each other for resources.

Individuals are thin, flat cells with vague senses and nervous systems. They communicate by sending each other strings of pseudo DNA. Some cells are specialists, like the Queen cell, Optic cells, Nervous Frame cells, and others. These cells have appearances that vary greatly from the standard Amoebus.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Mon Feb 20, 2017 5:56 pm
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Entry #1:

Wow. I was definitely more prepared for LMS 2 than I was for this round. LMS 2 had me sketching and making spreadsheets like nobody's business, and while I've been doing the same for "Conics," the going is far slower.

Maybe it's just because the opening sequence is so finicky. For LMS 2, I wrote a mystery/fantasy, and mysteries tend to have fairly standard openings. Or if not standard, at least more straight forward. I could start right at the moment where things started going wrong. "Conics" could have started anywhere, in almost any way.

But hey! I made it through week #1, at least. One way or another, I managed to get part one of the opening down, and it's almost exactly what I wanted. Hopefully I can keep Ellipse's snark and dry humor going through the whole contest, and hopefully I can get through my homework and have actual time to write.

I have a health paper due in late May that my dad has gotten rather extreme over. I mean, it is a graduation requirement, but it's also due in May, graduation has pretty much been delayed because of snow cancellations, and I'm definitely the only person in my circle to have started on it. Half my classmates don't even have the other requirements done.

But enough of that. Week one is over, and I'm buckling down to write out chapter 2. Wish me luck!

(note: if you've been reading "Conics," or anything I've written, really, feel free to comment in this thread. I have links to all the official stuff.)
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They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Sat Feb 25, 2017 2:55 am
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Entry #2:

Oh. My god.

NASA just located a solar system with like seven habitable planets, and I am suddenly so angry with myself for not considering different kinds of stars in my quest to create diverse planets for all the intelligent species in "Conics." I considered moons, life capable of floating through the atmospheres of gas giants, and all kinds of things, but I forgot that different types of stars would create different requirements for a habitable zone.

Forgive me while I change up the details of some alien species. The gato and specifus are getting like, total makeovers for their histories.

But first, it's time to scream incoherently because aliens.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Sat Mar 11, 2017 7:26 pm
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Entry #3

Man, this week has been so gross. I had a band concert Tuesday and a band trip Friday and I kind of just hate band right now. (But I still love my horn so much it's so beautiful.) Plus I'm way stressed because I had to take off two days of school last week to go visit colleges.

Missing school is god-awful.

Anyways, MIT admission notices are on Tuesday, so we'll see if things start to look better this coming week.

As for actual writing, I have again been reminded that I am awful at writing action scenes and fights. Like, holy cow it should not take me an entire week to write 1200 words, but here I am. Fight scenes are hard.

Thankfully, they are also short, because I know very few people have the endurance to fight for longer than two-three minutes. And a girl with no combat experience especially will not last very long. She really only makes it out of things because she has experience dancing, and because she ends up with crazy advantages.

Hopefully the advantages won't last much longer. I need to start following Murphy's law.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Tue Mar 21, 2017 1:30 am
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Entry #4

Image

A cover? Sort of? It looks way too serious for this book, but I have some concepts I might work on later that are a little more suited for humor. Character sketches should be the next thing I end up sticking in here... hopefully.

By the way, I was accepted into my state school! (Very exciting, yes) I've now been accepted to UW and Cal Poly, and I'm waiting on Cornell. Wish me luck!
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Wed Mar 22, 2017 2:02 am
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Who's That Character?

All the sauve space-farers we've met thus far, and what we know about them. Thus far.

Ellipse:

A problematic janitor working on the Fold Monitor.

Focci:

A siren who works as a technician aboard the Conics. He's rude and apparently an adolescent.

Wheelchair boy:

A human boy with no legs who works with two gato as a bounty hunter. He's also pretty rude. Everyone is rude.

The gato pair:

Feline bounty hunters. One is very light, and the other is very dark. They're probably the pair mentioned in Tejal Sethi's autobiography, but no one has confirmed it yet.

The tyran:

One of the siren's crewmates onboard the Conics. Evidently, the tyran are not often found out space-faring.

Captain Maj:

The captain of the Conics. He's only been mentioned, and we don't even know what species he is yet.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  





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Sun Apr 02, 2017 2:58 am
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Entry #5

I evidently forgot to update this thread last week. My sincerest apologies. Also, I know I promised character sketches, but I was very lazy these past two weeks, and had two band trips, and I am dying.

Also, getting Focci right is a pain in the butt.

Facebook decided that its IM app would no longer be supported on my phone, so I am very angry and have to research a new phone. Everyone in band at my school lives on Facebook's IM software.

But luckily, this coming week is spring break! If I don't spend all my time reading and drawing other things, I will absolutely get in some character sketches of at least Ellipse and Tejal.
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled
  








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