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Tue Mar 17, 2020 5:17 pm
candywriter says...



Hi! Can y’all maybe give me some ideas on how to write the end of this scene and the next?
Context: a girl named Maddie has to have stitches, but she won’t let the boy nurse give her the numbing shots. ..... she trusts him somehow.... ???
Here’s a clip from the story:

“Joe, make sure she’s comfortable with the idea of a boy giving her shots before you jump right in,” warned Frank.
Joe gave him “the look”, and picked up the first needle.
“Maddie, don’t be afraid,” he said. “I’ll be gentle on your arm, and I’ll do my best to make sure these don’t hurt badly.”
Maddie nodded, not sure she could handle it.
Joe was about to prick her arm when Maddie suddenly pulled her arm away.

Please tell me if you have any ideas! Thanks!
always, candywriter
  








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