I am a machine, but it's only skin deep. Once you break through the crust of my humanity, you'll find the soft clouds beneath. Just don't squeeze to hard, or I'll disappear.
"Often, the best way to improve is swallowing your ego and realizing you're a terrible writer in all aspects of writing, then working to improve it." -R.U.
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I am a machine, but it's only skin deep. Once you break through the crust of my humanity, you'll find the soft clouds beneath. Just don't squeeze to hard, or I'll disappear.
Dragons are always cool, and I like the classic 'around the campfire' feel to it. Very creative!
I am a machine, but it's only skin deep. Once you break through the crust of my humanity, you'll find the soft clouds beneath. Just don't squeeze to hard, or I'll disappear.
I thought it was all right. Very interesting, and I loved it because it was on a mythological creature. It seemed a little...fake, though, because you just kept saying 'It is this, it is that, scientists said this.' That's not bad, but if I were writing an article, I would have a quote or specific information that a specific person did, if that makes any sense. For example: Rather than writing 'Scientists are baffled by it.' You might try, 'Ronald S. Burgenson, one of the leading Cryptozooligists in the field, said in a recent worldwide report, "This creature continues to baffle us. Every day we think we have it figured out, and then it goes and does something rash and surprises us once again."
Of course, that does make it longer, but it makes it more fun and interesting in my mind. But remember, I am a weirdo who is addicted to reading and chocolate and often gets high on both, so not every bit of advice I give is good
I am a machine, but it's only skin deep. Once you break through the crust of my humanity, you'll find the soft clouds beneath. Just don't squeeze to hard, or I'll disappear.
"It suddenly struck me that that tiny pea, pretty and blue, was the Earth. I put up my thumb and shut one eye, and my thumb blotted out the planet Earth. I didn't feel like a giant. I felt very, very small." — Neil Armstrong
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