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Event 7: Not Your Average Villanelle



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Lauren2010 says...



Not Your Average Villanelle



Summary: Write a villanelle style poem, with a twist!

How to Enter: Post your entry as a reply to this topic.

Description: A villanelle is a poem that follows this structure:
A1
b
A2

a
b
A1

a
b
A2

a
b
A1

a
b
A1
A2

The lines A1, A2, and a will rhyme; the b lines will rhyme with each other as well! And the A1 and A2 lines repeat on several occasions throughout the poem.

For an example, look at Dylan Thomas' classic do not go gentle into that good night.

The villanelle developed out of the pastoral tradition, which idealizes rural life and landscapes. Since a lot of formal poetry follows themes of nature the object of this event is to create a poem with the least poetic theme. Forget nature and love; instead, wax poetic about your bookshelf, Tumblr, or Supernatural. The stranger the subject the better!
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Blackwood says...



Right then, I shall be lucky first.

____________Worms in the shower.

____________Four worms sitting in my shower;
____________up the drain they did climb
____________to grace me at this awful hour.

____________Up the pipes the water scours,
____________leaving a trail of sloppy slime.
____________Four worms sitting in my shower.

____________The colour of thick clam chowder;
____________The worms are not the normal kind
____________to grace me at this awful hour.

____________And all the soap did they devour
____________The conditioner; like the rarest wine.
____________Four worms sitting in my shower.

____________Drunk on super bubble power;
____________their bodies turn the foam sublime.
____________Four worms floating my shower,
____________grace me at this awful hour.
Hahah....haha.....ahahaha.





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Dear goodness, villanelles are a nightmare! That was infuriating to write, but also so fun. I love a challenge. So here is my sad attempt! [PS, that French word I threw in (pas de deux,) is a type of dance!]

Spoiler! :
A Late Sunday Morn'
by RachelLeeAnn

A late Sunday morn’ spent in between sheets,
with curtains drawn back and displaying the view;
outside the snow falls, but here there is heat.

All day long, I shall remain in my “seat,”
for I have no obligations, nor other things to do.
A late Sunday morn’ spent in between sheets.

With a book in my hands and socks on my feet
I watch as the flakes partake in a pas de deux.
Outside the snow falls, but here there is heat.

Oh, days like today are ever so sweet,
with my hair disheveled, and blankets askew.
A late Sunday morn’ spent in between sheets.

Due to their rarity, these days are a treat.
But they happen so fast, and then they’re through.
Outside the snow falls, but here there is heat.

So all day long, I shall watch the snow grace the street,
and this will be the only thing I do.
A late Sunday morn’ spent in between sheets.
Outside the snow falls, but here there is heat.
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Dear Stalker...

You are turning into that kind of creep.
I do not want to be the focus of your love affairs.
Can you please just stay away, freak?

Please stop following me like a lost sheep.
That is my utmost, sincere prayer.
You are turning into that kind of creep.

Around the corners, my eyes do constantly sweep,
For often you do lurk standing there.
Can you please just stay away, freak?

I am actually afraid to sleep,
For if I wake with you stroking my hair...
You are turning into that kind of creep.

You stalker, I know you blame love so deep,
I am not sure how to tell you, to be fair.
Can you please just stay away, freak?

I don’t really care enough to actually weep,
But I want you out of my window, because I swear
You are turning into that kind of creep.
Can you please just stay away, freak?
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Fri Feb 14, 2014 2:19 am
Hadj says...



My sad attempt at a villanelle
It says not to write about nature and love, well i kind of broke that rule, but I think its acceptable
18+ for language

Spoiler! :
Valentines Day- Fuck That
So apparently today is valentines day?
Don't know what they mean by that
I mean why the hell would there be just one day for love?

An excuse to sell chocolate for a dime?
A chance for a sale on cards with little doves and cats?
I dont mean to be offensive, but this shit's gay

"Will you be my valentine?"
Fuck That
This is one holiday we can get rid of

People seem to forget sometimes,
What it means to cry, and what it means to laugh at.
That's all I'm trying to say

Roses are Red, and Lots of dumb rhymes,
Why do we have a holiday for that?
Why can't I love you all the time, why today?
"Will you be my valentine?" *shove*
Lullabies and storybooks
And poems and other lies
Will make you happy and make you dream
But seldom make you wise





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Fri Feb 14, 2014 3:16 am
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It's really confusing with the quotation marks. I'm not sure they are correct, or even if I needed to use them, (I just wanted to show that it's a conversation).

"Gracie's eyes are inlays of topaz, ma'am."
"Topaz is a color, right, Madeline?"
"Topaz is a type of jam."

"Really, dear? Well, I like strawberry jam.
I eat it on bread, every day at nine."
"Gracie's eyes are inlays of topaz, ma'am -

Topaz. A nice, brownish-yellow jam.
Like sapphire, amethyst, I define-
Topaz is a type of jam."

"Brownish yellow... gravy on yams and ham!
But no good color for eyes, Madeline."
"Gracie's eyes are inlays of topaz, ma'am -

Glistening, precious, not resembling ham."
"Oh, jems? Like the rock on a ring of mine?"
"Gracie's eyes are inlays of topaz, ma'am.
Topaz is a type of jam."
Last edited by PinkPanther on Fri Feb 14, 2014 4:26 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Searching for an Envelope

Envelops are outdated
except I need one
so an envelope would be appreciated.

Like corsets antiquated,
like sitcoms on their fortieth rerun
envelops are outdated.

But progress can be belated
or simply undone
so an envelope would be appreciated.

But oldies aren’t adapted
just like mobsters with their tommy gun
envelops are outdated.

But some think progress is overrated
and have no mercy on a young ‘un.
Envelops are outdated
so one would be appreciated

Spoiler! :
Image
Test





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Elinor says...



Blame my current lack of an oven and subesquent baking withdrawals for this entry. >.>

Home Bakery

Truthfully, I bake for that perfect first bite,
edible heaven to my lips from the air
whether a cold winter’s day or a warm summer’s night.

From cupcakes to pie it was love at first sight;
I started simply, my eyes in a flare.
Truthfully, I bake for that perfect first bite.

The oven gave my life a light,
A pastime I regarded with care,
whether a cold winter’s day or a warm summer’s night.

nothing else felt quite as right
from the time I first held kitchenware.
truthfully, I bake for that perfect first bite.

The nearby bakeries I saw as trite;
variation produces my most excellent fare.
truthfully, I bake for that perfect first bite,
whether a cold winter’s day or a warm summer’s night.

All our dreams can come true — if we have the courage to pursue them.

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Ode to a Missing Sock

Without him you are incomplete,
But where he went I do not know.
I have but one sock for my feet.

Like a bed with just one sheet
Or no case for its lone pillow,
Without him you are incomplete.

I can’t tell who he went to meet.
On what adventures your kind go!
I have but one sock for my feet.

My other socks do not smell sweet
Oh please convince your mate to show!
Without him you are incomplete.

I suppose that I will have to cheat
And pull a look-alike from the row.
I have but one sock for my feet.

Perhaps I could have been more neat!
Now I’ll pay with a frozen toe.
Without him you are incomplete.
I have but one sock for my feet.
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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Dakushau says...



I don't write in this style very often, but I think that I did fairly well.

The Creaking.


The creaking, it comes from all around,
I hear it every day and night.
What could be making that sound?

In the noise of it I'm drowned.
It often gives me quite a fright.
The creaking, it comes from all around.

I find myself often dumbfound.
Even if it's only slight,
What could be making that sound?

It's always in the background,
And to my ear it is a blight.
The creaking, it comes from all around.

Will silence never again abound?
Is this now my eternal plight?
The creaking, it comes from all around.
What could be making that sound?
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Ok, so I just wrote a quick one called 'Precious'. It's in Gollum/Smeagol's (from Lord of the Rings and the Hobbit) point of view, but I'm really just playing around. I've never done one of these before, so... yeah. I might post another one later. :3

Spoiler! :
Precious, Precious, how I love my precious,
Precious, Precious for me.
Precious, Precious, to my mind you're infectious.

Precious, Precious, so golden and shiny,
Precious, Precious, I see,
Precious, Precious, how I love my precious.

Precious, Precious, oh so round; oh so tiny,
Precious, Precious for me,
Precious, Precious, to my mind you're infectious.

Precious, Precious, you're so small and so mighty,
Precious, always been there for me.
Precious, Precious, how I love my precious.

Precious, Oh, Precious, you're a traitor, Precious?
Precious really doesn't love me?
Precious, Precious, how I loved my precious,
Precious, Precious, to my mind you're infectious.



...Precious?
-bites off fish head with jagged teeth-
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xX I Love Animals, Nature, Alice Madness Returns,
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Do you look so bad?

Take a look at yourself do you look so bad?
Do you fart so much that you smell like a brat?
Do your friends tease you so much that you are now mad?

And if you look so bad, what about your dad?
And if he looks like you, well, fancy that!
And if he doesn't look like you, he must be so glad.

And if you have riches, more than you ever had,
Will you spend all of it on a groovy hat?
Then take a look at yourself, you still look bad.

But if you still don't believe me, then ask your dad,
And if you tell him about it he'll give you a pat,
And then he'll say "You look bad my dear lad."

And if you do believe me then don't be sad,
Cause I'm lying, you don't look ugly or fat,
But I'm still thinking, you look bad young lad,
Then take a look at yourself, you do look bad.

I want to win, at least once.
Our thing progresses
I call and you come through
Blow all my friendships
To sit in hell with you
But we’re the greatest
They’ll hang us in the Louvre
Down the back, but who cares? Still the Louvre.

- Lorde

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This was so much fun!

Hair Loss


Strand by strand, my locks, leaving its follicles behind.
O ! For all this hair loss !
Why has Beauty been to me so unkind?

Worrying about it is the only thing on my mind
This is my pathos,
strand by strand, my locks, leaving its follicles behind.

Help me, heal me, tell me how this be refined.
Really, is there any remedy for this chaos?
Why has Beauty been to me so unkind?

The internet tells me a solution they can easily find
to stop with fish skin and lavender moss
strand by strand, my locks, leaving its follicles behind.

Ah! So many remedies leave me in a bind,
which to pick, which to not. Maybe I'll throw a toss?
Strand by strand, my locks, leaving its follicles behind,
why has Beauty been to me so unkind?
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(Author's note: This challenge requires repetition. So I thought, what repeats? And the best answer I thought of was a dog's brain thinking about food. So here it is :-) )


I can smell the bacon fry.
Will I get the rind to eat?
And I can smell the chicken pie...

On the warm soft rug I lie,
beside the fire, absorbing heat.
I can smell the bacon fry.

I beg for food with big wide eyes,
look up to master for a treat.
And I can smell the chicken pie.

Shake paw, roll over, do I get a prize?
A jucy, tender piece of meat.
I can smell the bacon fry...

On the rug, alone, I cry,
as smells of food, so strong and sweet!
I can smell the bacon fry.
And I can smell the chicken pie...
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TimmyJake says...



I am afraid that this is the stupidest piece of poetry I have ever written. My first Villanelle, and probably my last. :P

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The wheels make a snowy flurry,
And leave tread streaks on the road.
I guess I left in an awful big hurry.

It wasn’t because of anything big or furry,
And it wasn’t even a toad.
That made me make a flurry.

Now I have to face a jury,
Due to how I left that abode.
Because I left in a hurry.

While I wait, my face is lined with worry.
Another problem is that I forgot the gate code,
So the gate was blown apart in a flurry.

I admit that I have an extreme sensitivity to Curry,
And someone filled my truck with an allergic load.
So it wasn’t really my fault I made the gate flurry,
Nor that I left in such an awfully quick hurry.
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