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//Well, I wrote these lyrics for a local band (called Arbitrator), of which my friend is the drummer, but they rejected it for some reason. So I've uploaded it here...

[Verse I:]
Indulge in war.
It's a war for air.
Leave a gunpowder scar.
Take one step hellward.

Court of God--
Lets bomb him dead
In name of the Lord,
Faded faith.

Men at work--
This site is under destruction.
Finalise the plan
Of the generation's extinction.

Mutated genes,
Mechanised womb.
The red blood,
The Earth's green
Turning gravely grey.

Men and machines--
Who'd tell the distinction?
It's just a fatal destruction
Of which I've planted the seeds.

You're just flesh and bones.
Spend your life in drudgery
For the drones.
Hang by the noose of rosary.

[Chorus:]
And I climb up on the wall
To see the world crawl beneath.
A few meters closer to heaven
And I see the giant mushroom.
Here comes our highly awaited doom.

[Verse II:]
The murderers
That are lording over
They're one of us.
I don't blame them.

The fall of Rome,
Reign overthrown.
Dinosaurs gone,
Isn't it our time?

I tried my best
To cure your death,
Bring back your breath
On this evil Earth.

But this world is too
Evil to
Hold on to you,
The brother of men.

[Chorus:]
And I climb up on the wall
To see the world crawl beneath.
A few meters closer to heaven
And I see the giant mushroom.
Here comes our highly awaited doom...

Very good! I would love to hear this...reading lyrics is never quite the same. (Although it's always worse to read them when you already know the tune of the song.) I just wanted to say that I think you did a good job - there's a lot of imagery in this, some good figurative language too. I particularly liked:

"Mutated genes,
Mechanised womb.
The red blood,
The Earth's green"

and:

"Hang by the noose of rosary."

I also liked the chorus, but the above are my favorite lines.

~Blue

Oh yes! I am definetely going to record the guitar for this. I'll got a great idea.

Hey There... I don't get it.. Why did your friend reject it.. Its really good.. I love the beginning and even the chorus bit is awesome..!! I really liked it a lot.. If you ever record it then put it on youtube or upload it here on YWS.. I would LOVE to hear it... Well Done.. Keep it up..
Harshita:)