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Mon Oct 17, 2011 9:26 am
NaRachel says...



Incomplete but here goes... :)

I need a little bit of help
With trying to deal with myself
Looked in the mirror and i don't like what i see
My hearts crumpled face stares back at me
I fell backwards off the top shelf
And felt colder than i've ever felt
Tried to climb back up but, 3 steps forward, 2 back
Sliding down the sharp ascent i sometimes lose the track

I can't talk to anyone about it unless that anyone is you
I need someone to tell me its okay and that someone is you
I know we had a fall out and met a fork in the road
But thinking of how it was, makes me want to self-implode
And the memories are haunting
But you could fix them with one conversation
I need some help from someone
and I won't accept it unless its you

I know that you have moved on long ago
I should have done the same, I know, I know
Trying to see past cracked glass but it blocks my view
And as the light reflects in my head i see you
I've changed so how can i ever be the same
I've got to at least save parts that remain
And i've grown pretty pessimistic- I guess I won't get through
But i can almost see it happening if i could talk to you
"You grow, you grow like tornado
You grow from the inside
Destroy everything through
Destroy from the inside
Erupt like volcano
You flow from the inside
You kill everything through
You kill from the inside"
  





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Mon Oct 17, 2011 4:51 pm
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angel007angel says...



Wow, I don't usually read lyrics but I decided to review this. And boy did I do right by clicking on this. It was very heart-felt and I felt like I could so understand it.
It does need finishing, but that doesn't matter. I can I just be a tad picky and make sure your i's are in capital letters because some people can be really picky over this, and I'm one of those people. Because these are lyrics I'm not bothered over the fact there's no full stops or commas. So you're let off there!

Overall, you should so keep writing as you have a good writing potential for lyrics.
- angel007angel x
  








Love is friendship that has caught fire. It is quiet understanding, mutual confidence, sharing and forgiving. It is loyalty through good and bad times. It settles for less than perfection and makes allowances for human weaknesses.
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