Young Writers Society

I came outside tonight
I wasn’t looking for a fight
With everything that seems so wrong in my life,
It’s nice to know there’s someone that will keep the light on
When I get home on a really dark night
It’s nice to know there’s someone that will always be there,
Will always stay true,
And will stick to me like paper and glue

Don’t you know it rains roses whenever you’re around?
You’re so fine, boy, I can’t keep my feet on the ground
If this isn’t love than I don’t know what is
Can’t you just give me one kiss?
I think about you every day and night
Boy, being with you just feels so right
I made a wish on a star just yesterday
Boy, don’t you know you take my breath away?
Can’t you see?
It’s raining roses

One night I was so afraid
I know, I’m not that brave
I was scared I had lost you forever
I know I say things I don’t always mean,
But I had such a horrible dream
You left me and never came back
Oh, baby please don’t put my heart on a rack
I saw you just yesterday,
But after that fight I was afraid it had all gone away

Don’t you know it rains roses whenever you’re around?
You’re so fine, boy, I can’t keep my feet on the ground
If this isn’t love than I don’t know what is
Can’t you just give me one kiss?
I think about you every day and night
Boy, being with you just feels so right
I made a wish on a star just yesterday
Boy, don’t you know you take my breath away?
Can’t you see?
It’s raining roses

I cried and cried
Why didn’t I see your side?
I’m missing you like no other
I could never find another
But then you came over,
Said you were sorry and didn’t mean anything you said
My heart felt like it was full of lead
I said I was sorry too,
So happy I could finally have you in my arms just like I always knew

Don’t you know it rains roses whenever you’re around?
You’re so fine, boy, I can’t keep my feet on the ground
If this isn’t love than I don’t know what is
Can’t you just give me one kiss?
I think about you every day and night
Boy, being with you just feels so right
I made a wish on a star just yesterday
Boy, don’t you know you take my breath away?
Can’t you see?
It’s raining roses

And since then everything’s been perfect
We both have learned how to work it
Keeping each other happy,
Laughing all the day
There’s no other way
You told me you had a secret to tell me
I smiled and closed my eyes
Before I knew it I could feel your lips pressed against mine
I counted to nine
You told me you would always be there for me,
And I gave you a kiss back

Don’t you know it rains roses whenever you’re around?
You’re so fine, boy, I can’t keep my feet on the ground
If this isn’t love than I don’t know what is
Can’t you just give me one kiss?
I think about you every day and night
Boy, being with you just feels so right
I made a wish on a star just yesterday
Boy, don’t you know you take my breath away?
Can’t you see?
It’s raining roses

Wow....this was reeally pretty. I love your flow of speech. It's really natural and rhythmic, and it doesn't seemed forced. I like that. My favorite lines were: "With everything that seems so wrong in my life, It’s nice to know there’s someone that will keep the light on When I get home on a really dark night"
Very nice piece you have here. Keep up the great work!

P.S. Double love the title :-p Roses FTW!

Awwww. I love this song, it would fit me and the guy I liked for 4 years but I stopped liking him in my 8th grade year. I really like the title it really fits and I love the lyrics. I ecspecially love these two lines:

I cried and cried
Why didn’t I see your side?

It really got to me and made me realize that everyone has a side that no one has seen and we all have to learn to trust someone so much to show them that side and when we show someone that side we have to be ready for every little thing that someone might say about it. I really enjoyed this song and even though it's not an actual song..yet. I can feel it and I really like it.

Wow, I really like this. I have no idea how to critique lyrics to a song, and I don't really know it's that's what you're looking for anyway, but I just wanted to say that I liked your lyrics.

I really like this first part;

I came outside tonight
I wasn’t looking for a fight
With everything that seems so wrong in my life,
It’s nice to know there’s someone that will keep the light on
When I get home on a really dark night
It’s nice to know there’s someone that will always be there,
Will always stay true,
And will stick to me like paper and glue

There was one thing, though, I don't really think you need to add the 'and' before 'will stick to me like paper and glue'. I think it just kinda slows it down and is un-needed. I think it would sound just as good, or even better without it. It's nothing big, though, just thought I'd mention it.

I also really liked the concept of raining roses whenever they were around. I don't know. That's just my opinion.

And also the chorus I liked. I always wanted to be able to write lyrics, but I could never come up with anything, so I admire you for being able to come up with such a great song. I really don’t know how to write lyrics. Anyway, this was great, I'm sorry I was no help to you, though! I apologize for giving such a lame review as well, I probably should have just kept it to myself, but I just wanted to say that I liked it (I'm sorry, now I'm just rambling)

Anyway, I'll stop bugging you now.
~Tayla