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Last Tear



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Thu Sep 15, 2011 7:29 pm
stargazer9927 says...



This is probably one of the sadest things I've ever written, but not all songs can be happy :) It's probably going to be for one of my novels so it's in a guy's perspective (even though I'm a girl). Please comment and give suggestions on how it can be better.

Slow, violin playing throughout entire song; really sad mood

Time tells all
Or so they say
You were always the highlight of my day
With those red lips of warmth,
I could have sworn I was in love
I could have sworn you were sent from above
But sometimes what you think and what actually is,
Isn’t always the same

I’m so tired of waiting
I’m so tired of trying
I’m so tired of pretending this will someday work out
I don’t want to shed anymore tears for you
Your time is through
We rushed into this too fast
It’s kind of crazy how our love was strong,
And now it’s long, long gone
Baby, this is my last tear for you

I was so in love with you,
And I thought you were in love with me too
Everything was perfect
Until that day when you said the famous line,
“I just want to be friends”
Only a couple weeks later, I saw you holding his hand
It’s just so crazy what once was is long gone

I’m so tired of waiting
I’m so tired of trying
I’m so tired of pretending this will someday work out
I don’t want to shed anymore tears for you
Your time is through
We rushed into this too fast
It’s kind of crazy how our love was strong,
And now it’s long, long gone
Baby, this is my last tear for you

And now I sit alone
All alone in my home
Wondering why I ever thought this would work out
I wasn’t thinking straight,
Wasn’t in the game
And now that our time is through,
I wish I could go back, and change what’s already happened
To me and you

I’m so tired of waiting
I’m so tired of trying
I’m so tired of pretending this will someday work out
I don’t want to shed anymore tears for you
Your time is through
We rushed into this too fast
It’s kind of crazy how our love was strong,
And now it’s long, long gone
Baby, this is my last tear for you
Let's eat mom.
Let's eat, mom.
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Thu Sep 15, 2011 8:05 pm
skye12 says...



You're right, not all songs should be happy ones. I felt what you were saying. I placed myself in a guy's perspective and imagined myself losing the girl I loved. What I experienced didn't feel good. The song sounds pretty good and I'm sure it will sound even better with those violins :).
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Thu Sep 15, 2011 8:55 pm
SteppinRazor says...



Aw this was so depressing! Poor guy!

I’m so tired of waiting
I’m so tired of trying
I’m so tired of pretending this will someday work out
I don’t want to shed anymore tears for you
Your time is through
We rushed into this too fast
It’s kind of crazy how our love was strong,
And now it’s long, long gone
Baby, this is my last tear for you
Yes, it's time he move on, time heals all wounds I strongly believe that. But I wonder they say 'Love lasts forever' since it ended that means it wasn't really love, but that's just me.

I was so in love with you,
And I thought you were in love with me too
Everything was perfect
Until that day when you said the famous line,
“I just want to be friends”
Only a couple weeks later, I saw you holding his hand
It’s just so crazy what once was is long gone
This girl is not worth it, I hate when they play with peoples emotions like that, it bugs the hell out of me. I love the violin! So it is probably amazing song! I loved this alot!♥

Tidal waves they rip right through me
Tears from eyes worn cold and sad
Pick me up now, I need you so bad
Down down down down
  





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Fri Sep 16, 2011 1:25 am
zinger1912 says...



OMG!! This soooo weird because I was going to upload a song wrote from a guy's perspective for my book *gasps and covers mouth* 0_o creeeeeepy
Lol
It was a very emotional song but I really liked it!! keep on writin!!!
I'm not inclined to resign to maturity.
If it's alright, then you're all wrong.
But why bounce around to the same damn song?
I know, you know, that I'm not telling the truth.
I know, you know, they just don't have any proof.
Your worst inhibition's gonna psych you out in the end.
  








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