Young Writers Society

This is just a nightmare
That I don't wanna have again
This has left me frightened
But I stuck it out to the end

This was just a misunderstanding
From someone i called a friend
This was just a hiccough in the road
But it felt like a huge bend.

CHORUS:
You put me into difficult situations
and that's why i turned mad
I might have been lost already
But its you that made that bad
You were the sane one and i was the crazy
You held the power
But couldn't persuade me
I know that i brought it upon myself
But can i blame you for one little thing-
YOU didn't help.

This is just a memory
I'll try to force from my head
I'll block my ears and shut my eyes
to find I'm ill to the heart instead

This was something I never saw coming
I ran into it blind
Even when you've left this town
You will still haunt my mind

CHORUS REPEATED

This is just a nightmare
That stalks me through the night
And haunts me through the day aswell
But I still haven't flight
This was just a misunderstanding
From someone i called friend
You can say its not a big deal
But don't try to make me pretend

CHORUS

CODA:
You sit there so happy
like none of it meant a thing
Inside your world is perfect
Because I'm not there, I'm nothing
My tears are invisible
But i'll try to make them fall
Just to show you that I haven't moved on at all.

CHORUS

Hi there!

So since this isn't finished, I'll just comment on your refrain because that's the part you wanted to know about.

I think your refrain is great. It really flows and you put a lot of emotion into it. You said you were going for the whole blaming someone else for your own mistakes and I think you portrayed that perfectly. I can definitely tell that she's beating around the bush here, trying to work it out in her mind, twisting your thoughts to make it seem like he did all the wrong, not her.

I hope this helped. Let me know if you there's anything else you specifically want looked at. I can't wait to read the finished product. Keep writing!

This one seems very similiar to "the Recovery" which isn't a bad thing to have a specific theme appear again. I do it a lot myself. I know you didn't finish this, but I didn't see anything wrong with it and I really liked it. I can relate to what is said. Not blaming someone, but someone blaming me for everything...good job!!!