Ok so i posted this because i'm not sure about it. I have two ways of writing songs: 1. I write the lyrics and then can never find a good melody. 2. I make up the melody and just kind of write whatever comes out of my mouth. With the first option i always end up with good lyrics. With the second i always end up with a good melody but horrible lyrics. This was written by the second option, so I'm just wondering are these lyrics even acceptable??? And yes my chorus is dodgy.
I went through pain,
for you
I can't explain what I did
my actions inexplicable
You turned me into someone crazy and irrational
Now my name,
to you
Is just a constant reminder
Of the hell you left behind ya
But I hope you know
(CHORUS):
I'm not okay
I'm not okay
I'm still on my way
To recovery
I'm not okay
I'm not okay
I'm not oka-ay
I'm still, stuck here in the dark
My mind wanders aimlessly through this playground-less park
As you sit, king of the castle
who holds all the power
can bring my down
In my finest hour
You made me wait,
for you
To say something in reply
But that's not what you had in mind
The silence screamed so loud it left me deaf and blind, unkind, what else?
I tried to hate,
you
But that just left me feeling guilty
Sad I'll never have you with me
But I hope you know
I'm following silently behind
Just to check that you're alright
CHORUS REPEATED
Wake me up from this
I can't sleep in empty bliss
Laugh and cry through my emptiness
Laugh manically at my own craziness
Don't you try to pretend you cared (Well done, well done, well done)
Underneath my skin is what's really there (Well done, well done, well done)
Never in your wildest dreams
Never meet anyone else like me
(Well done, you made a scar on my immaculate heart)
CHORUS REPEATED..
I don't blame
you
But you didn't lend a hand
Just like i'd always planned
So as I drown
I'll call this the recovery
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