So, I finally have one I'm not completely embarrassed to show! Still messing with a couple lines (bet you all can guess which ones), but it's something! Critique anything here if you want, but I will be editing whatever I post later to be not so icky (or, you know, if I read it in the morning and it makes me want to hurl ).
4/4/08
don't say a word:
flow from the side
on all the hopes and the lies,
left sitting behind
past this midnight hour.
hide behind walls
of paper thin lies
cry out when they leave you --
a stain on that wall.
then go back on all fours,
you'll be begging for more.
so hush little darling,
please don't say a word.
Mommy can't fix this
and I sure as hell ain't her.
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