Hi all, I am new to this site and i just heard from a friend about the national poetry writing month challenge. I 've decided to enter to keep my brain active while taking a break from studying and to try and improve my writing.
I'm two days behind so i'll submit two poems just now and then see how long i can last.
Feedback will be much appreciated.
Poem for the first day
The dollars, Pounds, Euros and Dinars
Did not create the Sun nor the Moon nor the stars
The Dolllars, Pounds, Euros and Dinars
Did not create this world in which we are
The Dollars, Pounds, Francs and Dinars, for them, the entire world you can serach it
But one day you'll see not a penny of it was worth it...
Poem for today
The doctor says, "Eat 5 portions of fruit a day"
The dietician says, "Drink 8 glasses of water a day"
The lecturer says "Read 1 chapter of Rawls' A Theory of Justice a Day""
Now i've said i'll write a poem a day!
But when is this "day" that i've been talking about
going to come?
Going to come?
Give up to get?
Give to receive?
Forget to remember?
Remember what?
That is what everybody wants to know...
But some say they know to want but just can’t get.
I keep saying this “day” will come tomorrow...
...
And yet more ellipsis...
But tomorrow has been over lapping me for five years now
Each morning she offers me the baton to take on
But I'm fast asleep, slowly awakening, dreaming i'm ready to change the world
But the world changes me from anger to sorrow, fear then hope.
Change or be changed?
But there ain't no change left, hardly even any notes, because they wanna
turn all tender to hard plastic cards
They call it a card of credit
But it only gives debt.
What was that earlier line I wrote...?
I'm not dyslexic
But i'm sure it was "Remember to forget",
Right?
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