a wide-open window the world calmly waiting and a little bird on the windowsill. fly, be free, faithful birdy what keeps you lingering here? fight your fears and leave! please
well this napo didn't go quite as planned we're nearing the end and i realize i'm not very proud of what i've done comments? left hardly any poem quality? rushed and shallow so,,, yeah ._. but i guess there's always next year :]
{32} 4/27
procrastination (a rather lame acrostic)
putting my work aside really, i should be doing it, but of course i'm not come on, me! stop this, stop running away from your homework argh... why is it that sometimes (most times) there are so many more interesting things to do than work? never mind anyways time for me to go i'll be saying oh no (if i don't go)
Hiiii @Spearmint !! <333333 dropping a quick review here! <3
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THIS IS MY FIRST TIME READING YOUR WORKS AND AAAAAAAAAAA I'm extremely charmed by your writing <3
I love poetry with big words and complicated structure, but seeing your thread is like a breath of fresh air AA! All your poems are so delightful in their simplicity, and you manage to bring the main message across in a short and sweet format AND I'M LOVING IT <3333333 It also fits with your theme, which is just poetry about random things in the world around you, so I'm not sure how to explain it, but it's like your writing style is so perfectly in sync with the entire ~vibes~ that your thread gives me! ^^ <3333333
I'll be dropping a review on a couple of your recent poems below~ <333
{28} lazy
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AHHHH laziness, our old friend :"D But I'm SO IMPRESSED BY HOW YOU MANAGED TO DESCRIBE THE FEELING OF LAZINESS SO PERFECTLY??? laziness is always like something I can never quite describe, but you've put it into words so incredibly well that I can feel exactkt what you're talking about and AAAAA THAT'S NOT EASY AT ALL <3333333333333
can we still fly with tissue-paper wings? i watch the air slip through me like water through a loosely-woven net and maybe i'll just let the current take me
IN LOVE WITH THESE LINESSSSSSS <3 the way you manage to bring such a nature-like feeling here with the whole air, water, wings and everything makes it feel like you're in full acceptance and at peace with the laziness and you don't let it frustrate you and that is such a powerful thought and I really admire how you managed to pull it off <3333
{29} :|
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this poem <\33333333 I could really connect to this poem, it's very easy to feel like a burden to others, and the ending of the poem describes perfectly how bottling it all up is more harmful than just letting it out, and I love that you closed it with a storytelling aspect, it really shows your love for writing <333333
The rest of the poem was deeply emotional as well- I think I personally would've liked it better if you had used some stronger verbs or some description, but I do understand that sometimes, raw feelings laid out the way you did are far more impactful for conveying the message, so I'll leave it up to you <3333333333 and if this was just a poem to vent our your feelings and not as a polished poem per se, then please don't bother with my criticism, sometimes you just gotta let things out <333333333
Aside from the poem, I just want to let you know that we're always here for you, to accept both your sadness and your happiness, mint <3333
{30} birdy
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this started off as a cute poem and then ended up a little O.O which is not a bad thing, I actually really liked this poem <3 I love how it starts off with the speaker describing it, before talking to the bird, and then finally urging it to leave, the 'please' at the end really upped the desperation, and I'd really love to see if you write a second part for this poem because I'm so attached to what happens between the bird and the speaker now aaaa <3333333333
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SORRY FOR SUCH A LONG REVIEW AJDNSJDEKE I'm sure you didn't want such a long review for all your sweet little poems, so please feel free not to reply, haha <333 overall, I'm really liking how beautifully your thread has come along and I hope you're super proud of yourself as well! ^^ <3 lots of luck and love for your next poem or venture, thank you for sharing and keep growing <333333
EDIT: OOPSIE I JUST REALISED YOU POSTED A FEW MORE POEMS AS I WAS WRITING THIS HAHA XD
Viola Tricolor also known as wild pansy, Johnny Jump up, heartsease, heart's ease, heart's delight, tickle-my-fancy, Jack-jump-up-and-kiss-me, come-and-cuddle-me, three faces in a hood, love-in-idleness, and pink of my john-
AHHHH EUPH THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SUCH A LOVELY REVIEW!!! ^-^ Don't worry about the length at all; I enjoyed reading every bit <3 And omg it's like you interpreted my poems so much more thoughtfully than I wrote them xD and I just want to thank you so so much for reading <333 You are an absolutely wonderful person and lots and lots of luck and love to you too!!! <3333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
if today i slingshotted myself into space with the propelling force of all my failures would anyone miss me? if i left this earth to be with the stars gazing at their burning light up-close would anyone care? if i held my breath and dove into their centers choosing to be vaporized into oblivion would anyone notice? or am i simply a disposable blip in the cold-hearted dance of the universe?
{34} 4/28
lighter
flick. a wavering flame clinging to the tip of the lighter. it hovers closer, spreading fire to candles, a joyous kind of burning. and as they sing happy birthday, and you blow out the teardrop flames, take your chance to make a wish. tell your dreams to the universe and let it whisper them back to you.
ah, the second-to-last day and my inspiration fails me well i suppose i'll write one of those poems that are more space-fillers than poems but hopefully by writing a non-poem tomorrow i'll be able to poet better ¯\_ (ツ)_/¯
@Spearmint AHHHH OF COURSEEEEEE IT'S AN HONOR TO LEAVE A COMMENT ON SUCH A LOVELY THREAD <33333 I'm so glad the length wasn't a hassle <333 AHH I tend to overthink things a lot, so that's probably why I overanalyzed your poems XD ahhhh, of course, it was a pleasure to read your poetry, AND AAAHHH no you're a wonderfuller person than me <333333333333 thank youuuu, love you <333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333
Viola Tricolor also known as wild pansy, Johnny Jump up, heartsease, heart's ease, heart's delight, tickle-my-fancy, Jack-jump-up-and-kiss-me, come-and-cuddle-me, three faces in a hood, love-in-idleness, and pink of my john-
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