Young Writers Society

@alliyah - thank you for your comments! I'm glad you're enjoying my poetry and aesthetic so far! <3 <3 <3

@Charm - ahh cats are great ~ I'm glad you enjoyed the poem! <3 <3 <3 (My cat's name is Sage! She's my b a b y haha.)

I'm still a big fan of how that sea monster one came out <3 and the lyrics you chose to go with it are super interesting too!

Those last two lines though "this is my kind of intimacy. after all, / water imagery is my love language" there's something that sounds very dangerous about the whole concept of being in love with something that is monstery / ghosty / in the sea - and creates this expectation dissonance for the reader that's really intriguing.

Also 11 is simple, but I love the idea of scrapbook memories, ahhh just a very poetic thought!

IHC <3
whoopdedoop all of your poems are so lovely !! I really love how you're able to combine like, literal and metaphorical language/images so flawlessly and satisfyingly?

Like "i stayed up until 1 am last night, / painting the ceiling a landscape piece
/ with every shade of our silhouettes." -> you go from this very straightforward "I stayed up too late" idea to "painting the ceiling" (which obviously isn't literally being done) but that barely even registers and there isn't an awkward shift between literal to nonliteral and aaaah I just love it :')

Poem #17 is really interesting and has a lot to dig into, I think! I find it really effective how a lot of the stanzas are almost framed as commands: "look into yourself", "think of that", "feel your heartbeat". That imperative tone creates a sense of being controlled that complements the subject perfectly.

(and tomorrow,
there won't be any reports
of two people drowning.)

My response to this is best summarized by O: but seriously, only you could add a what-could-have-been-way-too-melodramatic plot twist to a poem and have it just work c:

gmo your latest poem is just absolutely *chef's kiss* :') Especially love the three-element list "you, your, yours", it adds this super intriguing mood of possession to the poem :D

You are going so strong chi! Well on track to 30/30 poems for this NaPo and gahh they're all awesome! Can't wait to see what other lovely skeleton-and-cigarette imagery you come up with <333

Ooooh 21 and 22 are so solid! I like the repetition of insomnia / sleeplessness in your poetry, I think it works really well as a metaphor / vibe etc. And the way your twisting familiar phrases in poem 22 is just excellent, the language comes across as both casual and tragic.

The opening of 21 too was just really powerful, and I think can be taken in quite a few directions. Your metaphors are always so interesting and poignant - the whole skin + fingernails is really memorable. I'm still really enjoying your poetry, and looking forward to the rest of your napo! Wonderful job so far!